Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Norelco (YET AGAIN)
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Norelco[edit source]
Since the vote was pretty much unanimously against... OK, well, I get the point that you didn't like it. So now if you could be a little more specific, rather than just giving a one-liner saying all my efforts have been in vain... 
artin ltimatalkcontribs 19:42, 3 August 2007 (UTC)
| Humour: | 7 | I'm getting a good but indistinct vibe here. Suggest you weed out the random (IKEA), the unpleasant (random mentions of pedophilia), and, indeed, anything that isn't particularly funny (see "prose," below) |
| Concept: | 5 | The concept is too random (two parts business history to one part philosophy) to really be intrinsically funny. That isn't to say it can't be made funny, but you're fighting an uphill battle. |
| Prose and formatting: | 6 | This article is too wordy. "Side Effects and Controversy" could probably be omitted entirely. |
| Images: | 8 | The images are all okay, except for the one of the Mona Lisa, which is downright hilarious. |
| Miscellaneous: | 7 | I mentioned above that this article is business history and philosophy mixed together. You manage to keep the mix consistent throughout, which, given the average quality of articles here, is commendible. |
| Final Score: | 33 | Just as one human being to another: the parenthetical addendum "(YET AGAIN)" that you added to this submission to Pee Review says more about this situation than the article itself does. I don't know what kind of trash-talking you received on your last trip through Pee Review, nor do I think I really would be happier if I did. You haven't given up the fight, and this is good. But I think that, rather than immediately implementing or discarding the suggestions I and anyone else have given, that you simply walk away from this article for a time and return to it with fresh eyes. Don't try and force greatness. Uncyclopedia is a hobby for those in the Wiki Generation who have a few extra minutes here and there. Don't let an idle hobby become a consuming obsession. |
| Reviewer: | Tritefantastic 01:22, 10 August 2007 (UTC) | |