Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Keith (Name)
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Keith (Name)[edit source]
The link above is for the "Keith" article. The article I would like reviewed is the Keith (Name) article. Thanks. JS2isKING 14:04, 27 April 2009 (UTC)
| Humour: | 2.8 | Ok, right now, your article borders on random/unfunny. There are a few common mistakes that you want to strive to avoid: first, no Chuck Norris. Chuck is a tired, overused, and unfunny internet meme that just makes people cringe. Second, you have a few random dates (1996, 100 BC) that you want to strive to avoid. I suggest you overhaul the article to get rid of those 2 things. Third, you have a list, and i'll get into that in the P&F section. |
| Concept: | 3.5 | I take it your name is Keith? Well, I suppose making an article about the name Keith has some potential for humor in it, but whatever genuine jokes there are in there are lost in a sea of cliches. It's original, granted, but you just don't have the right stuff to make it funny. I suggest rewriting it so the concept can be expanded more than just a brief stub. |
| Prose and formatting: | 4 | You avoid major spelling errors and missteps, but you make a mistake with the lists. Lists are nearly always tedious, unfunny, and redundant. The whole "Notable persons" section is something that has been done many, many times. Try replacing both of those sections with something along the lines of Keith has been proven to be superior to many people, and should not been mistaken for inferior people such as _____. Also, your section headers are brief; try merging a few. |
| Images: | 3 | You've got two images right now, and while the second one has no major problems, if feels kind of out of place in the section- try moving it to the "History" section. Your first image of Chuck is, as I mentioned before, a cliche-get rid of that one, and replace it with a less overdone Keith, maybe Keith Olbermann. |
| Miscellaneous: | 3 | My overall grade of the article. |
| Final Score: | 16.3 | You've got a solid concept and a decent grasp of the English language- your main problem is that you suffer from what many new writers do. Here are some things you can do: First, eliminate all cliches and stagnant jokes in your article- Chuck Norris and Oscar Wilde have got to go. Second, take your Notable and Non-notable lists and merge them into one section, such as Methods of Keith impersonators or Why you wish you were Keith. Finally, expand your idea a bit- a stub always leaves the reader wanting more. Good luck! =) |
| Reviewer: | Saberwolf116 22:39, 5 May 2009 (UTC) | |