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Jack Myall

Thomasfan666 01:24, 26 June 2009 (UTC)

This raptor is guarding this article while his master, Iwillkillyou333 is reviewing it. Be Careful! He Bites.

Humour:	4	Well, theres not alot to review, but I'll do it. First I'll have to say this is a random article, because I know that Jack Myall is fictional. If you going to make a random article like this, you have to do a good job on it, or someone will think this is stupid rather than funny. Second, there are alot of red links, and red links are fucking annoying. So please remove all red links. Third, the article is two short. Short artciles are usually easy targets for deleion, especially random ones. The best thing to do is to expand it, make it more longer. It doesnt have to be as long as the Titanic, but enough to at least keep it from deletion. Fourth, theres a list at the bottom. Problem with lists is that there rarely funny. I think you should remove it or make it into a paragragh. And finally, the information at the top needs to be on the right side in a box with a picture (opional) up top.
Concept:	2	Your concept is weak. Its just about a man who fought alot. I think you need a beter concept.
Prose and formatting:	4	You have alot of mispells on here, and that isnt good. I advise you go over your article and look for mistakes. I'll give you some advise; there are two ways to look up mistakes. The first one is Microsoft Word. It has the spell check that will look for spelling and grammar mistakes for you, although it isnt always reliable, as something that is spelled wrong on Word may be spelled correctly in real life. The second and the best option in the Proofreading servive we have here. It allows someone to proofread and look up mistakes and correct them for you for you. All you have to do is put up the Proofreading template and someone will check it for you. To learn more about the proof reading service, click Here.
Images:	4	There are two, but only one of them supports your article, alhough its just a stick figure. The oher one is just completely random and probaly should go. You need more images to suppirt your article.
Miscellaneous:	4	Eh can be better
Final Score:	18	This really needs alot of of work. I think ou should rewrite it and start from scratch, or put it on QVFD and start with something new. And please the HTBFANJS. If you have any questions, comments, or complaints, just go to my talk and I'll reply. Cheers.
Reviewer:	--IwillKILLyou333 Talk If you dare 02:59, 26 June 2009 (UTC)