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HowTo:Reenact History

It's my first forray into the HowTo: section. I feel like it could use something(s) more.... but what? Perhaps your gifted editorial instincts can discern. Thank you! Rpm 07:11, February 12, 2011 (UTC)

This one's mine.---   TALK What's it like to be a heretic? 22:42, February 13, 2011 (UTC)

nevermind, couldn't find the time, so anyone can review this now---   TALK What's it like to be a heretic? 06:20, February 15, 2011 (UTC)

Well, since now I do have time, I'll give this another go---   TALK What's it like to be a heretic? 23:30, February 16, 2011 (UTC)

I shall have it done in a few hours.---   TALK What's it like to be a heretic? 18:21, February 17, 2011 (UTC)

Nearly finished, just need to put the finishing touches on it.---   TALK What's it like to be a heretic? 00:58, February 18, 2011 (UTC)

Humour:	5	While you do have alot of info about reenacting history, the tone that the narrator use is juvenile. While the article is suppose to be funny, it doesn't mean the narration has to be outta-wack. Check my article I showed you early. The article shows the humor while the tone remains professional. The beginning part of the article (or intro) doesn't really gives a well intro into the article. You should begin the article with something like "So you want to reenact history. Lucky for you, I will help you on how you could do it. Just follow these steps." It doesn't have to be exactly in that context, but it gives you an idea of were I'm going with this.
Concept:	5	Concept wise, the article is pretty good if I say so myself. Yet the execution of the article is a bit of a let-down. The main problem is that the article is full of lists. There are three reasons that list should not be used (or at least limited) 1) they're overused 2) the Htbfanjs goes against them, and 3)They tend to rush over the jokes they're telling and ruins the flow of the article. While lists could be funny if written properly (very rarely), I prefer that you avoid them as much as possible. Instead, turn those lists into pargraghs. By doing that, you can be more indepth to the jokes, and will keep the flow of the article unchanged. A good example of this is this HowTo article that I made. It shows how to do things without the need of a list.
Prose and formatting:	9	Spelling and grammar seem ok, although that section where you tell the reader to say words differently and the rest of the section does exaclty what it asks, I would prefer that you give an example instead. It's up to you though. Also, there is a red link on the article. Since they do not lead anywhere, redlinks serve no purpose and are annoying, so get rid of that link (but not the word itself).
Images:	8	I think the images are fine. They're just plain and simple, but they'll work. Although the last one should be bigger. Just make it 200px and put it on the image code the same way you put captions on. Its that simple. The captions in the second and third images are fine, but the first image's captions seem to talk about a group of soldiers rather than how that scene goes along with the article. Instead, relate the scene on how they are reenacting history. I think that would be a better idea to do.
Miscellaneous:	6.8	My average grade of this article.
Final Score:	33.8	Not a bad article, it just needs a few touch ups. Feel free to ask me any questions you have on my talk page. Cheers!
Reviewer:	---   TALK What's it like to be a heretic? 01:48, February 18, 2011 (UTC)