Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Hentai
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Hentai[edit source]
I wrote this article fairly recently, however, due to the popular subject matter, it was quickly consumed by the wiki, and is no longer wholly mine. Some of the content added by other users is good, other content less so. I am submitting it here in the hope of wrapping all the mismatched fragments together into a coherent article. Carthago delenda est.
G'orzak the Dubious 02:27, 13 July 2008 (UTC)
- Mmm, I wont review this now as I can't be bothered. But I'd just like to say quickly solely from your comment that when you create an article that gets lots of edits, it's generally up to you to maintain it. removing the shit stuff as it comes in and allowing the good stuff to stay. Letting an article get edited unsupervised is just bad parenting. SK Sir Orian57Talk RotM 07:37 20 July 2008
Humour: | 3 | As Orian mentioned, I'm going to review this without respect to who made what edits. Okay, the usual breakdown:
Okay, back to the review...
In conclusion, the article gets a 3/10. I nearly laughed out loud at the "running along a cliff wall" joke, but there were absolutely no other memorable jokes in here. There need to be. |
Concept: | 5 | The concept of this one seems so obvious: write a parody of a Wikipedia article, with some fake "facts" and some very dry, sarcastic humor about the absurdity of Hentai, and we've got ourselves an article. So, how did we go wrong? How did this end up being partly in the first person and partly in the third person, and a giant pile of listcruft (lists of templates, lists of types of hentai, lists of mainstream anime that's been turned into hentai...) |
Prose and formatting: | 4 | The prose is, for the most part, fine. The formatting is horrible. Pictures should go on a margin, and have text wrap around them - they shouldn't be dropped in like giant bricks. Pictures should almost NEVER be over about 300px unless they're somehow part of the narrative. Articles should start with ledes and not a pile of templates. Sections should have fairly consistent lengths (unless the length of one or two outliers is a joke in itself). Links should appear fairly consistently in the article - there should not be long sections of text with no links. |
Images: | 5 | This article could do so much better; there's hilarious hentai images out there, and hilarious ways to caption them. The "costumes" picture isn't really funny. The Yuri picture isn't captioned in an ideal way. The shitting dick nipples picture, well... wow. I have nothing to say about that. |
Miscellaneous: | 4 | This review has been brought to you by the number 4. |
Final Score: | 21 | There's a lot of work that needs to be done on this one to bring it up to par with the rest of Uncyclopedia. Honestly, if I didn't know there was someone actively working on this one, I might slap a medium rewrite tag on it; other editors might even nominate it for VFD. Cleaning up the formatting would go a long way toward making this look like something Uncyclopedia wants; putting in the right jokes and finding the right tone could turn this into something Uncyclopedia needs. Good luck!! |
Reviewer: | 19:00, 1 August 2008 (UTC) |