Talk:The Old Country

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The Old Country by DJ Irreverent[edit]

Begun by someone else, I have tidied up this article. The second and third sections aren't mine, but the rest is, so, uh, keep that in mind. Written in a traditional article style, unlike everything else I've written. Thanks, guys!   Le Cejak <15:46, 30 May 2008>

Mwhahahahahahaha I have the single worst headache ever ached and a high fever so a second review is probably in order... --Sir DJ ~ Irreverent OZ! Noobaward.jpg Wotm.jpg Unbooks mousepad.PNG GUN.png 11:57, 31 May 2008 (UTC)

I enjoyed this article. Although, it's way too Eastern European. There are OTHER "old countries," too. 19:23, December 21, 2009 (UTC)

Humour: 7.7 I'm not going to give a very in depth assesment but I liked the humour in it a fair bit, I liked how the thing ended and it felt like it was improving towards the end. Maybe you could work the history in as more stories your grandparents tell. The problem was it felt a bit long, maybe you could cut it down a bit by shifting some of the humour into an info box about the country or something. Hard times felt like a losable section (apart from inflation which I'm sure you could work in elswhere) and Why Your Grandparents Are Disappointed In You didn't scan at all as a title. Otherwise it was funny but not L.O.L funny.
Concept: 7.8 Good concept, very nice. I, personally, would like it a bit more if there were a few sections that break the seriousness and stuff.
Prose and formatting: 8 Cant fault the speeling or grammatical. Formating was just... normal and I love different formatting :P
Images: 7.7 More than suitable but not really that funny
Miscellaneous: 7.8 popopopopopopopopopopopopopopopopooooooooooopoooooooooooppppppppppppppooooooooooooooppppppppppppppppppppooooooooooo
Final Score: 39 Very nice and satirical, just needs to be read over, cut down and stuff to break the seriousness before VFH.
Reviewer: --Sir DJ ~ Irreverent OZ! Noobaward.jpg Wotm.jpg Unbooks mousepad.PNG GUN.png 12:23, 31 May 2008 (UTC)

Humour: 8 Ok, let me just say this this a very funny article - I even made a sort of breathy choking noise at one point (I don't laugh out loud). The problem is, the article really fades out towards the end, so much so that I had to struggle through the last section. The problem is, I think that the article doesn't "build" (like others I have seen) it just continues on in the same vain. My advice would be to gradually make it more and more like your grandmother ranting about how hard life was back in the old country. Throw in a few conversational bits and make the claims more and more outlandish as the article progresses. Some of the repetition works well, however, for example onions and borsch.
Concept: 8 Good idea, well thought out.
Prose and formatting: 8 Well written, though it becomes a little leaden towards the end. I think I spotted a couple of fragments somewhere, so see if you find any and fix them. Also, the article needs a lot more links so that it fits with the Wikipedia-thing.
Images: 10 Great! Some of the image captions are the funniest bits in the article.
Miscellaneous: 8.5 Averaged
Final Score: 42.5 A good article, well written. When I was about halfway I was thinking "this is fucking excellent, 10/10 for everything" but unfortunately it became a bit of an endurance test towards the end.
Reviewer: -- clammy Ape (burn) (Riot Porn) 20:58, 6 June 2008 (UTC)