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UnNews:George W. Bush and Japanese Prime Minister invent a new secret hand-shake[edit source]
I like this one. I want to know what people think.--Mgr. Sir Sonic80☭ 20:26, 6 July 2008 (UTC)
The following article is now piddled by Gert5. NO TOUCHY!
| Humour: | 6 | Fun, but not quite. The whole "stole teh handshake" was nice, but the restarting the world part was funny for me. That means it's not funny for anyone else, as far as I know. Now fix it. Try adding a little "may cause WW3 with a handshake like that" or something. idk lol. Stealing a handshake felt good, but not good enough. "Released without actually revealing" could have some work though. The butterflies part was funny (and even had a quote mark typo). The final part could also have some work done. |
| Concept: | 4 | Not amazingly funny for a concept. Only one source, but, a good take on it. I rly dunno what to say here. |
| Prose and formatting: | 6 | Good, but not good enough. Especially the fact that it's a news article. It needs more "'Sample', Guy claims"-type news nonsense. And by nonsense I mean looking like a real-looking news article people would read in a newspaper and say "Yoo! Daz soo real, d00d!" or something like that. Anyways, good prose, but needs more work. Typoes possibl.
Also, all the links were going a little overdone. Do you click on blue words when reading the newspaper? In fact, newspapers don't have blue words. Wikinews does. So anyways: Take off some links, and leave only the "I wanna read about that"-looking article links. |
| Images: | 4 | Satan! That's not Potatochopped. This site's ALL up on da photoshop. Ask somebody to chop an image for you on Uncyclopedia:RadicalX's Corner or make your own darn image. Of course, for such an article, an image like that works anyway. But it's still good if you add another. |
| Miscellaneous: | 5 | Averaged your score. |
| Final Score: | 25 | Not exactly bad, but just average for UnNews. Getting this for VFH will probably be a hard task. |
| Reviewer: | --Sir General Minister G5 FIYC UPotM [Y] #21 F@H KUN 11:41, 8 July 2008 (UTC) | |