User talk:IFYMB!/Frome

Good start. Reads as a little.... forced maybe, in some parts. Specifically by calling us "rascals on the internet." No one really talks like that unless it is a satire or something like that. And... yes this is a satire site, but the letters should maybe sound more realistic. Also, you may want to interject a bit more anger into this. Don't go over the top with it, but right now you are coming off as too congenial. You say you are angered, but I don't feel you are angered. And... that's all the advice I have to give at the moment. Take what you want. The Woodburninator Minimal Effort ™ 04:24, 27 June 2013 (UTC)

I used "rascals on the internet." as I was trying to sound elderly and old, but I understand what you are saying. Thanks for the imput :) IFYMB! Talk to me baby! 18:08 27 June 2013