Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/tricycorn
tricycorn[edit source]
75.35.240.28 21:07, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
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A big mug o' reviewin' strength tea? Why, that must mean this article is being reviewed by: UU - natter  (While you're welcome to review it as well, you might like to consider helping someone else instead). (Also, if the review hasn't been finished within 24 hours of this tag appearing, feel free to remove it or clout UU athwart the ear'ole). |
I always try to give an in-depth review, although with an article of this length, that'll be a challenge. --SirU.U.Esq. VFH | GUN | Natter | Uh oh | Pee 09:26, Apr 3
| Humour: | 2 | Try as I might, I can't really find any jokes here. This is a really short article, and as such, not really suited for review - the advice you have on the ICU tag should be all you need for now. Follow the ICU link on it, and read the page that takes you to quite carefully. Then look at the rest of the tag, and follow the advice - expand, add content, write more, you know? Perhaps treat most of the points in that little list as sections, and add a paragraph or two under each, explaining how the 3 horns offer en evolutionary advantage or disadvantage over the regular unicorn?
Also, have a good look at HTBFANJS. Don't let the name put you off, it's not a page devoted to telling you you're stupid, it's chock full of comedy writing tips that will help you, if you're willing to learn from it. At the moment, what you have here is, not to put too fine a point on it, a stub with no real content beyond a simple idea, and it will get deleted fairly soon if you don't add some funny content to it, so please have a good think about what I've said here - I am trying to help! |
| Concept: | 3 | Again, there's no real concept as yet, there's just a few lines, which is hard to define much from. However I've given a 3 here because I think there's comedic potential in a 3 horned unicorn if approached properly, but you will have to work to get that out. Perhaps horns 2 and 3 are in front of the eyes, impeding the vision, leading to comic mishaps? I dunno, there's always the fear of the different to fall back on.
As a side note, take a look at Why?:Hunt Unicorns, which may give you more ideas. |
| Prose and formatting: | 3 | Very little of it, as I believe I've mentioned. A quick formatting tip: use the # symbol at the very beginning of a line to produce numbered lists on a wiki. (Putting a space before it won't work). Click the edit button on this page and look at the following to see what I mean:
The * symbol does the same for bulleted lists, like so:
Finally, lists don't go down well around here unless they're short and surrounded by plenty of content - they're seen as a lazy way of doing things. So use them sparingly. |
| Images: | 0 | None. |
| Miscellaneous: | 2 | Averaged, that's the way we tend to do things here. |
| Final Score: | 10 | OK, that's not a good score, but please don't be put off. Everybody has to start somewhere, and most of the best writers on here started on short articles that were nearly deleted, but improved. The way to improve is to take advice (such as what I've given you here, and what's on the pages I linked to) and then put it into practice. The more you write, the better you get, so keep going and see what happens!
Finally, please remember this is only my opinion, others are available if you want them, and good luck! |
| Reviewer: | --SirU.U.Esq. VFH | GUN | Natter | Uh oh | Pee 09:46, Apr 3 | |