Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/rasta-nomads (3rd review)
rasta-nomads[edit source]
69.234.32.61 06:17, 4 June 2008 (UTC)
Tell you what - how's about you go away and spend more time making changes recommended by Hype's recent review before putting this up for review again? You were given plenty of information about what was wrong, but instead of making changes, you've just shifted a section a bit and put a disclaimer at the top about how you suck at writing. Well, there is one way to improve at writing: write more! Sorry, but it's the truth. Have a good look at HTBFANJS, take on board the comments in the last review, and make some more significant changes before requesting another review.
Of course, that's just my opinion - someone else may come along and review it again for you. But I'm not going to waste my time reviewing something that hasn't really changed since the last review. --SirU.U.Esq. VFH | GUN | Natter | Uh oh | Pee 10:15, Jun 4
- Here's the thing, guys. We see you have a lot of enthusiasm for writing funny articles, and that's a good thing, and we're glad to have you here. But I'm telling you: So So, Cajek, and SysRq could collaborate on rasta-nomads for a week and it would still be awful. It's just not a funny topic.
- Here's my advice to you: write something you know. I honestly don't get the feeling you guys know all that much about Rastafarians, Jamaica, marijuana culture, reggae, or nomadic tribes. Take something you know and rip it to shreds with razor wit.
- Here's another piece of advice: make fun of something other people know about. Why don't you look closely at the list of recently featured articles: Uncyclopedia:VFH/Featured. Notice that every author there knows his subject like the back of his hand, and writes about something we all delight in seeing skewered. Yes, we've all sat there popping bubble wrap and thinking "Why is this so much fun?" We can laugh at ourselves. But almost none of us have ever hung out with a Rastafarian; none of us have ever met a nomad; and combining the two doesn't even make sense.
- I really think it's time to set this article down and start working on something new. Good luck. --Hyperbole 18:56, 4 June 2008 (UTC)
| Humour: | 5 | |
| Concept: | 5 | |
| Prose and formatting: | 5 | |
| Images: | 5 | |
| Miscellaneous: | 5 | |
| Final Score: | 25 | I don't think it makes any sense to have both this Pee Review request and this one open at the same time. I'm pretty sure pee reviews need to be consecutive, not concurrent. So I'm going to do a pseudo-administrative closure on this one. PEE people: Please don't count this as one of my reviews, in-depth or otherwise. If you think this closure is inappropriate, please just revert it. Thanks. |
| Reviewer: | Hyperbole 04:11, 5 June 2008 (UTC) | |