Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/ninjapedia
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A big mug o' reviewin' strength tea? Why, that must mean this article is being reviewed by: UU - natter  (While you're welcome to review it as well, you might like to consider helping someone else instead). (Also, if the review hasn't been finished within 24 hours of this tag appearing, feel free to remove it or clout UU athwart the ear'ole). |
| Humour: | 3 | Well, it's a stub with only a few lines, and what's there isn't particularly funny. But it's not actually random (bonus point) and I think there are a couple of promising ideas in there. So a 3 from me means it's not funny but it has promise. |
| Concept: | 4 | When I first saw the title, I was expecting to give this a very low concept score. However, on looking, there may be something you can do with this, so I'll not be too harsh. |
| Prose and formatting: | 6 | OK, there's not much of it, and there are too many pics for an article of this length. However, hopefully you'll expand this, at which point the number of pics will be more adequate. The spelling and grammar is fine, and the formatting is good too. So this gets a 6, which from me means "above average". |
| Images: | 7 | None of them are inherently funny, but they are relevant, not random, and there will be about the right amount if this gets expanded. So that's a good solid 7. |
| Miscellaneous: | 5 | Average of previous scores |
| Final Score: | 25 | See below for more detail, but I think this could be expanded to a decent little article if you work on it. However, in the current state, it's notiing special, and may struggle on VFD if people are feeling harsh. |
| Reviewer: | --Sir Under User (Hi, How Are You?) VFH KUN 09:51, 24 December 2007 (UTC) | |
OK, I think you need to take the central idea and run with it. I like the fact that you haven't just made it a book about how awesome ninjas are and then spent ages detailing cool ninjas or anything. The book is so full of ninja theory that it is dangerous by itself. Great! Let's expand this, and detail the different ways it has killed readers, or would-be readers. (Perhaps one of the tests of whether you have what it takes to be a ninja is if you manage to read the book and survive?)
Try to keep it in the realms of the plausible but amusing, rather than get silly, so a fatal papercut; the poisoned ink; an entire 12 volume set falling onto someone's head precisely on a dangerous pressure point known only to ninjas; a copy left 'carelessly' in the middle of the floor tripping someone into an electric fire, that kind of thing. Have fun with it!
And then, as a one-joke article can fall a little flat, work with the other concept, of the book being disguised under different covers. Perhaps it became so deadly and dangerous that the decision was taken to destroy all remaining copes, only to find that the books could no longer be, er, found! And so the hunt begins - trained ninja librarians and literary critics roam libraries and book stores, searching for the books before they strike again at the unwary, claiming more victims!
Have a look at HTBFANJS as well - that's fertile hunting ground for those in search of good ideas.
This review is now longer that the article, so hopefully that shows you there is plenty of room for expansion. Please do expand this, and give me a shout if you get stuck and would like more suggestions (although I am likely to be mostly inactive until the New Year now, I may pop in before).
And as always, these are only my opinions, others are available, and good luck! --Sir Under User (Hi, How Are You?) VFH KUN 09:51, 24 December 2007 (UTC)
- Thanks so much for help Underuser! Your comments were, helpful, insightful, constructive, and so clean they could be a Good Housekeeping article. I plan on implementing your ideas, some of them in a Ninjapedia Related Deaths subheading. --Dallasallad 16:40, 24 December 2007 (UTC)