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As always, I like two different opinions. Yes the article is unfinished. Yes, I want it in-depth. Have a nice day! You know what the music means... Our time is up. 19:18, October 16, 2009 (UTC)

And the link doesn't work somehow? User:YouKnowWhatTheMusicMeans/MGMT--You know what the music means... Our time is up. 19:19, October 16, 2009 (UTC)

As music is in my genes (or is that jeans?), I'll examine this one. King of the Internet Alden Loveshade??? (royal court)  04:36, October 17, 2009 (UTC)

Concept:	4	Intro to me Personally, I think it's helpful to know where a reviewer is coming from, so this will let you know how unqualified I am. I'm the current Noob of the Month, and am nominated for Reviewer of the Month, so at least somebody thinks I don't totally suck. I have a half-way decent background in music, and took a small handful of biology classes in college, but that's been a long time ago. Your concept seems original (as far as I know, there aren't that many guitar-playing genes out there), but is very limited--a gene that plays music. While you manage somehow to make something out of this, I think the concept keeps you from doing very much. There's also the limitation that somebody who hasn't studied both biology and music in some detail won't get a number of your references.
Humour:	4	I like putting Humour and Prose and Formatting in the same section so I don't repeat myself too much, but I do score them separately. I read the article through without reading the Wikipedia article, then glanced at it for background before writing this. "Originally based on a human Chromosome....."--I'm assuming Chromosome is meant to refer to something else, but don't know what--company? A group? I rather liked "DNA's Progressive themes and Synthesizer riffs" because of the connection between the biology and music terms (although this should probably be "DNA Progressive themes," unless you intend DNA to be a person.) "Resign with Columbia Chromosomes...."--this seems to conflict with "independent Chromosome." In a real music article, if someone resigns it would likely have been talked about previously in the article or it could be assumed the reader would be familiar with the musician's past. "On October 5, 2007...."--this section is essentially lists. List's are difficult to make work, and generally only work if the reader is very familiar with the topic, either because it's common knowledge (list of Beatles' songs), or because the author has already clarified them previously in the article. "MGMT is often confused with O-6-methylguanine-DNA methyltransferase...."--I didn't get this part. Coding Styles "MCMT is well known for it's (its) progressive style of gene copying...."--I like the sound of this and in general recognize the technical skill of your writing, but what's progressive about it? Yes, Progressive rock sometimes deviates from 4/4 time, but even a die-hard fan might not get this reference. Also how does this relate to biology? The lyrics "CCCGCG...." etc. I found amusing as you start with letters common to both music and genetics, but I suspect only someone who's studied both biology and music would get this. History "MGMT did not originally intend to be a gene...."--what is a gene in the context of this article? What was it before it became a gene? If it experimented with "artistic coding," what was it when it did this? "...Anaphase University...."--I like the university name. But the rest of this sentence is extremely obscure. "In the autumn of 2006...influential chromosomes...."--again, what is a Chromosome in terms of this article? A company, a group of genes? "....Clonacular Spectacular, in 2007. To support this album, it preformed at the East By East Endoplasmic Reticlum (EXEER) and Mitochondrial City Limits...."--I like these names, partially because I've always like the sound of "Endoplasmic Reticlum" (I have no idea why). But I like the way you've mixed terms from music and biology.
Prose and Formatting (details in Humour):	7	I think this is well-written, but the obscurity of your topic makes it's difficult to pin down. Also this is relatively short, but with a limited subject like this it may need to be short.
Images:	7.5	I like the image, but would like it better if part of the gene were overlapping the guitar (closer to the viewer than the guitar)--the guitar seems to be floating in front of the gene, and there's no indication that the gene has hold of it. (You wouldn't generally have a photo of a guitarist with a guitar wthout part of the guitarist's arm or hand on the guitar, so that by layers there'd be the guitarist's hand or arm closest to the viewer and overlapping the guitar, then the guitar, then the rest of the guitarist's body). If this doesn't make sense, let me know.
Miscellaneous, which may or may not be an average of the above:	5.625	Average of above.
Final Score:	28.125	Again, I think this is so obscure that very few people will get your references. I'm probably a rare combination as I've taken university courses for both biology and music majors, and I didn't understand several of your references. But you do have some clever twists here, and bring together seemingly completely unrelated elements. And I definitely liked the way you combined musical and biological terminology.
Me:	King of the Internet Alden Loveshade??? (royal court)  05:51, October 17, 2009 (UTC)