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User:Mordillo/So you thought that using the Euro as currency would be all fun and games?[edit source]
I started this article after a particular annoying day in the office, without managing to find the bloody Euro key on my keyboard. It started out all right, but then it sort of gained a life of its own and ended somewhere completely different from where I originally planned. Opinions shall be valued. I know that the formatting is a bit problematic as well, but it might be a part of this article's certain...charm? Ah well. Be gentle.
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13:19, 15 July 2008 (UTC)
| Humour: | 7 | I think that it works alright, I'm a bit anal about formatting, and the whole break all the rules does not really add humour factor. The way you've done with the lists I think has killed a lot of the humour; it just does not flow too well. I like the sections with Juin Luis and form this those to a really great article emerges, the two previous are too listy, these add to the length in a way which seems unnecessary. taking things out a little I think having the whole thing as a Monologue of the like the last paragraph would work very well, you'd also have a consistent style throughout although I tend not to use the {{Username}} within articles. You could also expand to a more manual style - it just seems a little too random (for me). I like the whole Euro adjust/tech problem idea and there some funny moments particularly the New monitor bit and the final section. Pretty funny, I personally think that its consistency and the way that it is put together, I know you say this is intentional, but I think it would be lot better with a little more structure. |
| Concept: | 7.5 | No complaints from me here, I like the idea a lot, I think the "life of its own" is a little literal and I would reign it all in a bit better - either a monologue on the part of nameless narrator throughout with out the lists etc. Or court files like you have at the end, or an unhelpful manual; I think attempting them all does not seem to work too well. |
| Prose and formatting: | 5 | I do not like this aspect of your article. I thin that’s its' listy. There are a few spelling errors about, like Rubal instead of Ruble - there’s one or two of these minor deal about. When you actually write prose you write well and these parts are funny and do flow well - the lists and the bold test I am always bitching about in articles - I just don't think these look to good and they detract form humour in articles. No red links but not too many in there; I'm guessing you'll add them later. Overall I think it looks messy, you say this is intentional, for me I don't like it, I always like the very tidy stripped back look. |
| Images: | 7 | Good, Alignment/sizing are a little dodgy - I tend to have a constant sizing thought out, usually 250px or if I don't have too many images bump them up to 300px. However you have a few that are simply too big and make it all look a bit poor, I usually, on the advice of others and experience tend to align right - as this looks tidy - The align centre here looks very dodgy. I like all of the images particularly the Invoice Picture and the Juin Luis, the others are funny ad relevant |
| Miscellaneous: | 6.8 | I have been told that I’m evil with scoring, but there's a good article here if it a bit more tidied up and I should think that it'll have no trouble on VFH. For me the only real gripe is the inconstant speasker and the messy formatting - otherwise this is pretty funny and theres not really anything I could think to add here. |
| Final Score: | 33.3 | I hope I was of some help, Just leave a note on my talk page for anything ;) |
| Reviewer: | --Sycamore (Talk) 21:25, 15 July 2008 (UTC) | |