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User:Colin "All your base" Heaney/dicks lol

FUCK YEAH I AM SO PUNK ROCK! 20:44, December 11, 2009 (UTC)

Reviewer details:

A little bit about the reviewer before we start.

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Prose and Formatting:

How good does it look and how well does it read? 4

I am seriously hoping that this was put up just for the irony of it. I had nothing in there to laugh at. I read it three times and still had trouble finding something funny in it. The joke is simply in relation to a text image. There is not much I can give in this regard as there's hardly any text to say that there is a writing style, there is no layout to speak of as such.

Concept

How good an idea is behind the article? 5

There is a very vague potential behind this concept. I'm thinking of something along the lines of An Article Written by Somebody that Didn't Read How To Be Funny And Not Just Stupid: A Retrospective crossed with Guide to a Postmodernist Art Exhibition. Take the piss out of the over-intellectualisation of the art world, especially as it relates to artists such as Jackson Polluck.

Humour

How funny is it? Why is it funny? How can it be funnier? 1

Is there something in here that I should be laughing at?

Images

How are the images? Are they relevant, with good quality and formatting? 0

There are no images

Miscellaneous

The article's overall quality - that indefinable something. 3

I have nothing more to say. A bit of a waste of time as it is. It might be better, but you'll have to remember HTBFANJS - especially when it advises you to spend a bit of time on an article.

Final score

Prose 4	Concept 5	Humour 1	Images 0	Misc 3	Final Score 13

Summary

An overall summation of the article.

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This was a PEE review by Pup

....Anyway...

Humour:	5	Well, I think part of the problem here might be that it comes off as a little random. But, I'm guessing you meant it to be that way. I don't fully understand why you decided to have dicks lol be painted by Jackson Pollack's evil twin, Bollock, but I think you could go places with it. I may have gone with an internet thing, but whatever, tomato/tomatoe. A few places gave me some sweet, sweet, Jackson Pollack parody, but perhaps be a little more subtle with it, or more outrageous with it. I think it's possibly stuck in the middle right now. I do think this has the chance to be expanded (more about this Bollock fellow, and more about the amazing painting itself), but whatever if you don't want to take it that route. Something that did make me chuckle in here, "He was on his way to his studio to design some more dick-related paintings..." In the context of the article, I liked it a lot.
Concept:	6	The fact that we don't already have an article on dicks lol is a travesty. I love the idea of writing on this subject. The reason I'm giving it a bit of a lower score is because of the route in which you took it. I think that the subject has huge possibilities if taken in a different route, but this Bollock/painting thing confuses me (but again, if you're going for it, cool. If that is the case, I dunno. I'm not always great at writing random humor.). I don't hate random humor, but I'm not sure that this does random in the best way. Expand it a bit more and I may change my mind on that though.
Prose and formatting:	6	On my screen, the image is running into the line above it. I'm not sure if that is a problem on yours as well, but I would see if you could do something about that. I liked some of the more subtle stuff. "The Second World War Two" made me chuckle, along with the sentence that contains it.
Images:	10	Dicks lol!
Miscellaneous:	0	Given the shape that it is currently in, I am withholding giving you any additional points, as this needs a little more work (in my opinion) to make things really pop, and work.
Final Score:	27	I apologize if I am missing the point of this article. If so, tell me on my talk page what it is, as I would like to chuckle about it later. But as is, it's not popping the way you want it to. Work with it a little more, figure out exactly what you want to do with it, and go from there. Past that I hope you don't mind the double review. I doubt you do mind, but I will hope regardless. Find my talk page if you want to talk about this further.
Reviewer:	Woody On Fire! Talking Woody Stalking Woody 08:09, December 20, 2009 (UTC)