Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/UnPoetia:Tao Te Ching
UnPoetia:Tao Te Ching[edit source]
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A big mug o' reviewin' strength tea? Why, that must mean this article is being reviewed by: UU - natter  (While you're welcome to review it as well, you might like to consider helping someone else instead). (Also, if the review hasn't been finished within 24 hours of this tag appearing, feel free to remove it or clout UU athwart the ear'ole). |
OK, I'll have a go. --Sir Under User (Hi, How Are You?) VFH KUN 11:42, 15 January 2008 (UTC)
| Humour: | 8 | Oh I like this. Very good. Not in-your-face, some subtlety, some really nice lines, lovely. I particularly like: Ways, Make Million Dollar Quick, Aquafina, Television and Boredom (which is a good way to finish it). The others are also good, mind. |
| Concept: | 9 | I like the concept too. |
| Prose and formatting: | 9 | Yup, well written, strikes a good balance between matching its inspiration and having a dig at modern life. Formatting fine. Maybe add a few more links? |
| Images: | 8 | There are images, they are relevant. However, they feel a little small, and there's room for at least one more in there - it leaves quite a lot of white space between the text and the images on a larger screen. (/me resizes) Hmm, looks much better on a smaller screen, but I still think there's room for at least one more. |
| Miscellaneous: | 8.5 | Averaged according to Tao of review by master Ca-Jek. |
| Final Score: | 42.5 | Yeah, I really like this. In fact, I'm very tempted to pop it up for VFH and see what happens. The only thing stopping me is that my record in so doing is less than brilliant. A couple of comments below, as is my wont, but yeah. Did I mention I like this? |
| Reviewer: | --Sir Under User (Hi, How Are You?) VFH KUN 12:09, 15 January 2008 (UTC) | |
Is it just me, or is this passage from the original set up for a valley girl/Paris Hilton/whoever skit?
"The Mysterious Female
The Valley Spirit never dies
It is named the Mysterious Female.
And the doorway of the Mysterious Female
Is the base from which Heaven and Earth sprang.
It is there within us all the while;
Draw upon it as you will, it never runs dry."
Also, possibly include a reference to "the battle for hearts and minds" in the Tao of War?
Actually, I don't have a huge amount of suggestions. There are, of course, so many things you could write about, but I think it's quite a good length - much more would be overkill.
I'm not going to pop it on VFH yet, I've decided, but I would hope it would do well on there as it is. So I leave you the choice: to VFH as is; to consider my suggestions and then VFH (or ask me to); or to not VFH, and just be proud of adding another quality article to Uncyclopedia!
Just remember: this is only my opinion, others are available, and good luck! --Sir Under User (Hi, How Are You?) VFH KUN 12:09, 15 January 2008 (UTC)