Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/UnNews:Hyrule physicists report quantum fluctuations (quick)
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UnNews:Hyrule physicists report quantum fluctuations[edit source]
good enough for the unnews front page, just wondering if you think it'd stand a chance on VFH. it's similar to this unnews, so does it stand on its own, and is it funny enough? 17:30, 24 August 2008 (UTC)
| Humour: | 7 | The references made me smile, and it's executed perfectly, but the concept is a bit of a problem |
| Concept: | 7 | I thought this was going to be another joke about Link's infinite pockets, but you surprised me by taking on the other oddity of Link's travels. But it still feels a bit lackluster. Try having it be written after Link is arrested for fluctuating the time stream. Mention reactions from his allies across the world, and describe in detail the havoc he has wrought. I know it's a bit of a radical change, but you don't have to take my advice |
| Prose and formatting: | 10 | Done just like a real news article. Excellent |
| Images: | 6 | It's a news article, but even so the picture feels...bland. I can't put my finger on it. Try to manip it to make it look like a mugshot. |
| Miscellaneous: | 7.5 | Average'd! |
| Final Score: | 37.5 | You can take my suggestions or not. It's your article. |
| Reviewer: | --WhySoSerious 23:51, 6 September 2008 (UTC) | |