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UnNews:Heath Ledger rejected from 27 Club[edit source]
OK, so this breaking crap story might be a bit too soon after the fact--but what can I say, when the muse strikes, she strikes hard.
Oh, and if that made any sense, please explain it to me.
Thanks! --Vana 23:11, 22 January 2008 (UTC)
| Humour: | 7 | Well, I like the idea. The article is a bit of a one-trick pony, but then, so are a lot of Un-News articles, so it's churlish to mark you down for that. However, there's room to add extra stuff to this - suggesting that the others mentioned in the article had done something to merit legendary status, while Ledger starred in A Knight's Tale, for instance. OK, he's done more, but you can make the "club" sound a bit more stuffy and elitist that way, which might help. Play around with that idea perhaps? |
| Concept: | 7.5 | Again, I like this - but you need to watch consistency. You start by saying the requirement is to be a celebrity, and then have them saying he's not even a musician, technically. OK, so the people you mention are all musicians, but I'd say you need to think about how you go about this - either have the club consider changing its requirements to musicians only, or otherwise properly explain that all the members seem to be musicians, making this an unofficial entry requirement. Something like that, anyway. |
| Prose and formatting: | 8 | Well done, except for the concerns mentioned above. |
| Images: | 6 | The right number for the length, and the Brokeback/Hulk one is used quite well. However, having a pic of Nirvana with a comment about the club's reaction doesn't work so well. A pic with just Kurt, as the spokesman, or with a couple of the people you mention, would work betterer. |
| Miscellaneous: | 7.1 | averaged per club rules |
| Final Score: | 35.6 | As I say, this is pretty good as it is, and I like it. It may not be to all tastes, but it could have been a lot worse. Have a think about my comments above, just to really bring it together a bit more, but it's still pretty good as it is! |
| Reviewer: | --SirU.U.Esq. VFH | GUN | Natter | Uh oh | Pee 11:44, 10 February 2008 (UTC) | |