Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/UnDebate:Is it Okay to ban Justin Beiber to the 3rd World?
UnDebate:Is it Okay to ban Justin Bieber to the 3rd World[edit source]
69.244.129.141 22:41, September 8, 2010 (UTC)
THIS IS MINE! MINE AND ONLY MINE! TOUCH THIS IN ANY WHICH WAY AND I WILL USE YOU IP ADRESS TO HUNT YOU DOWN AND KILL YOU IN YOUR SLEEP! MINE! --Happymonkey39 
Dah Meme Master 00:52, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
....dammit....i hope this is good enough for in-deapth. After all there are no pictures and the article is very short...--Happymonkey39 Dah Meme Master 02:03, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
| Humour: | 3.14159 | Before i start i would just like to mention not only have I ever done a review on a UnDebate but i have actually never read an Undebate... so sorry if that effects it in any way.
Now heres the problem of this article. You are very one sided. You cleary have a everlasting hate for JB (so do I). Not only that but i can't tell fof you love or despise rock and roll. Bottom line is that you cures everything rather than joke about them. Calling you a stupid hilbilie that sings like a girl isn't funny. Saying you remind me of my mother when she had too many drinks on karaoke night, has more of a humorous tone to it. Now this article did have some humor in it. In my opinion there are a few ways to make someone laugh. 1. Extream irony. 2. Unexpected Insults/Jokes. Irony is ironic...wait...let me try that again...Irony is awesome, if it's a great joke with a deep meaning it can bring in some mad laughs or make people make that noise that kids make when someone gets called down to the office..yah know..ooOOOoOoOOoOo... Also when you suddenly say something so unexpected (not necessarily random, although sometimes may be) it makes people laugh! Usually you find that kind of humor in lists. Now i like your comment on the Swine Flu, it's good cause you pulled out a stereotype (yes i think of Mexicans when i hear wine flu like i think Asian with Dance Dance Revolution, it's risky but good. That kind of humor brings a good article. Oh! How could i forget! LINKS! I see 1...2... 2? That's it! I have more layers of flab folding over on my belly (12 Btw)! Lots of links is good. Too many is bad. Now there is a difference between this kind of link and this kind of link. I consider the second one a "funny link" because it makes you laugh, haha, hehe. Now they are also funny since they link to different things than what they say. By putting these in, it brings color to your page as well as humor. Now be careful of red links, since a few are O.K but too many hurt. |
| Concept: | 4.5 | I simply love this Idea. BRILLIANT! Brilliant i tell you!...the article... no not that, the idea of banishing Justin Bieber to a place with the so called "deadly" swine flu! You should run for president.
Now to be serious. I don't quite like how you used sucha great idea. I mean what's with the whole MetalHead stuff? It's too off track for me, it actually confused me at one point, mainly cause i was trying to decode if you hate or love rock. Also you only have a few opinions from the basic Girl and Boy. Where are the actual politics? I mean you mentioned Obama yet you didn't make him have any part in it as i remember. So i would say be a bit more open with your "sides". |
| Prose and formatting: | 3 | Just want to quickly note, you did use the word "stupider". Now if that was supposed to be an ironic term than nice job, If not...ugh. I would advice a reference maybe. In case you don't know a reference is this little blue thing. [1]What this does is if you click the blue thingy it takes you to the bottom where you can see a smart or witty comment on what that sentence contained. To do it you must put <ref> before your comment and a </ref> after. Then ad a <references/> tag at the bottom .
There are a lot of typo's in this... you may want to put a {{proofread}} tag at the top of your page so someone will look it over and fix those mistakes. ...hold on hold on... how can you be ...bald, ugly and have long greasy hair...I mean bald people may have shiny heads, but they aint greasy! I do like the way the page is put together...but again...never even read a debate so it might always be like that -_-"
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| Images: | 0 | Was none, sorry i have no choice but to give you a 0. Now what i would advise are some bad pictures of JB, and maybe a photoshop picture of JB at some kind of conference or even jail! Maybe some Mexican References, or what about JB in a sombrero! But keep in mind, the caption is just as important, no, in fact it is more important that the picture. You can have a completely irrelevant picture, yet you link it to the article with the caption, but if you have a stupid caption you have to have an Uterry HILARIOUS picture to even it out. |
| Miscellaneous: | 7 | I have to give you some credit for haveing such a good idea, so here's a boost for being epic! |
| Final Score: | 17.64159 | Good work, i see you not actually a member...so you probably wont even read this. But it was good, and if it was your first thats fantastic, we got some good stuff instore coming from you. Oh, try to lay of the language a bit if possible however. |
| Reviewer: | --Happymonkey39 Dah Meme Master 02:02, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
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