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UnBooks:Living with Trimethylaminuria[edit source]
G'orzak the bold 12:36, 10 June 2008 (UTC)
 Aah... Fag is in the process of "relieving" you. |
My first review for my adoptee :D --~FAG! +chatline "if it ain't broke, break it" (CUN·VFH)
| Humour: | 9 | You know, I really am finding it difficult to put much into this section, because all of the underlying sections explain any little problems with the article that can be solved. In this part then I can explain something: a good Pee Review is one that's got about a paragraph in each section (except maybe for Miscellaneous, you'll see why in the section itself). What you want to do is try and help the reviewee with any problems you see on their article. If you see a problem in their spelling, factor it into their prose and formatting section, for example. Basically Pee Reviews are all about suggesting how the user can improve on their article, and most certainly not about saying whether it's good or not. You can say whether it's good or not (I have in this one) but the main point is the improvement. It's why people on here go to the Pee Reviewers ^^ |
| Concept: | 9 | Really great idea! It's refreshingly original ... I've never heard of it and it introduces you to the subject in a nice way. I love the overall structure of the article, a constant switch between a story from before and what's happening at that moment. |
| Prose and formatting: | 8.5 | Other than that giant fish at the top, it's really well put together: it was a really nice touch when you started talking about the UnBooks template. Just for you, seeing as you're my noob an'all, I went through the article and corrected some grammar and spelling mistakes, and now it's all good. Don't make any changes aside from the fish. (read the next section for that) |
| Images: | 6 | Your (one) image certainly illustrates the article, but it doesn't really work. The disease is nonetheless about the smell of fish, but the picture isn't really needed, or funny, and makes the article look a tad ugly. What's the bets thing to do is put one or two images, smaller, at the side. It's eye candy for the people who read down the page and it also really adds to the humour. That fish could be used at the top-right corner, smaller, and with a caption under it saying something funny (suggestion: something like "I can't even get this girl into bed any more!") You'll want to add, maybe, one more image just to pretty-fy the article, which you'd probably put in the middle somewhere, something funny that's related to the text next to it, with, of course, a funny caption, something like a play on words. If you don't know how to make them smaller and caption them etc, you can do it like this:
[[Image:Rainbow_Trout.jpg|center|800 px]] <- that's your one. [[Image:Rainbow_Trout.jpg|right|200px|thumb|I can't even get ''this'' girl into bed anymore!]] <- better In fact, seeing as you're my noob, I did it for you! Aren't I nice ^^ |
| Miscellaneous: | 8.1 | Averaged, using template:Pee. If you didn't know, that basically takes all of your scores like this: {{Pee|9|9|8.5|6}}, and averages them (i.e. adds them all together and divides them by how many there are). It's great to use in a review when you don't really know what to put in the "Miscellaneous" section (and most people never really do know, not even the best of the best. Miscellaneous is a highly miscellaneous word.) |
| Final Score: | 40.6 | I really, really like it. Considering that you're someone who's occasionally annoyed people (uploading pornographic pictures, doing really short Pee Reviews) it's really great to see such a work of high quality from you. It shows promise for all those people so insularly welcomed by suspicious cabalians. (disclaimer: there is no cabal) |
| Reviewer: | ~FAG! +chatline "if it ain't broke, break it" (CUN·VFH) | |