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Time travel

Look, it's one of them article things. What think? – Sir Skullthumper, MD (criticize • writings • critchat) 23:26 Oct 16, 2007

Humour:	10	How do you do this? I don't know anybody that could somehow connect depression and time travel. You're like Dr. Seuss, except younger, and you don't ryme, and without the pretty pictures, and alive.
Concept:	6	Sadly, this has to be the lowest score. Time travel is one of the least original things in the world (and yet we still don't have it. Go humanity). Fortunately, you seemed to ignore that tiny point. The awkward moments in the past were especially good, and I think I lol'd when you showed the remarkable tendency for time to slow when we least want it to, and vice versa. You may also want to throw something about Murphy's Law in there since they have pretty similar concepts.
Prose and formatting:	9	Great sentences, perfect spelling, and perfect pacing. I caught a few sentences that seemed rather awkward, but I took the liberty of slightly editing them to flow better (hope you don't mind(like you can't change it anyway)). The only big problem I saw was in the first endnote. I couldn't really tell what you were trying to say in the first sentence, so you may want to work on the wording of that a bit.
Images:	9	The images were rather plain, but it really didn't matter because of their hilarious captions. Only reason it's not a 10 is because I think there should be at least one image that actually relates to time travel. Though from the looks of it you seemed to be intentionally avoiding them. Eh, whatever.
Miscellaneous:	9	Whenever I read one of your articles, I'm always impressed by the number of words you manage to link. The only reason you didn't get a 10 is because you said "Squee" in one of your edit summaries. I can do that because this is misc.
Final Score:	43	This article is probably the best example that I've seen of what an Uncyclopedia article should be. No in-jokes so that anybody can enjoy it, perfect pacing that keeps it interesting, and the seeming insanity that should have made us so famous by now. With your permission, I would like to VFH this. It will be featured, and it deserves it.
Reviewer:	Unsolicited conversation Extravagant beauty PEEING 03:08, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Also, this review is my excuse for putting off making an "official" thank-you template to aiding PEEING. I can do that because we're all about Pee Reviews. However, since you improved the userbox without even being asked, you're still getting a thank you. It's just gonna take a while. Unsolicited conversation Extravagant beauty PEEING 03:08, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Okay, tried to fix the wording a bit more. (I dabble a bit too much in the abstract sometimes, but I like to do it in footnotes so it doesn't interrupt the flow.) Yeah, an image of time travel would be nice, but the fact is, as soon as I wondered "what should I put in the article?" I quickly realized I didn't know what a picture of time travel looked like. (Maybe I'll find one later; any suggestions?) And yes, you've my permission to VFH! (Woohoo!) – Sir Skullthumper, MD (criticize • writings • critchat) 19:02 Oct 17, 2007 In fact, I'll save you the trouble... (Double woohoo!) – Sir Skullthumper, MD (criticize • writings • critchat) 02:35 Oct 18, 2007