Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/The Old Country
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The Old Country[edit source]
Revised and expanded. It's a long article, but I think it's worth a read. What do YOU think? • <3:25, 05 Jun 2008>
I don't have a template, but I'm doing this one!-- contagious Ape (legislate) (Riot Porn) 20:26, 6 June 2008 (UTC)
| Humour: | 8 | Ok, let me just say this this a very funny article - I even made a sort of breathy choking noise at one point (I don't laugh out loud). The problem is, the article really fades out towards the end, so much so that I had to struggle through the last section. The problem is, I think that the article doesn't "build" (like others I have seen) it just continues on in the same vain. My advice would be to gradually make it more and more like your grandmother ranting about how hard life was back in the old country. Throw in a few conversational bits and make the claims more and more outlandish as the article progresses. Some of the repetition works well, however, for example onions and borsch. |
| Concept: | 8 | Good idea, well thought out. |
| Prose and formatting: | 8 | Well written, though it becomes a little leaden towards the end. I think I spotted a couple of fragments somewhere, so see if you find any and fix them. Also, the article needs a lot more links so that it fits with the Wikipedia-thing. |
| Images: | 10 | Great! Some of the image captions are the funniest bits in the article. |
| Miscellaneous: | 8.5 | Averaged |
| Final Score: | 42.5 | A good article, well written. When I was about halfway I was thinking "this is fucking excellent, 10/10 for everything" but unfortunately it became a bit of an endurance test towards the end. |
| Reviewer: | -- contagious Ape (legislate) (Riot Porn) 20:58, 6 June 2008 (UTC) | |