Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Stages of Grief
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Stages of Grief[edit source]
it's been reviewed a few times before. It's an article that's not too bad. It needs recommendations for improvement (probably long enough, I think) -- • <-> 16:58, 20 October 2007 (UTC)
Humour: | 6 | Great job! As usual, you put forth your comedic talent and subversive humor in a well organized manner. However, I do recall seeing an article very similar in theme. Like AE said, your jokes do go stale and by the time I got halfway, I was getting kinda bored. |
Concept: | 6 | Like I said before, the concept of the stages of guilt really isn't that unique. Sure, you may have been first to come up with the article for the concept, but there are many other articles who share this theme. Again, your jokes do go stale, and seem to be borrowed from constipation. |
Prose and formatting: | 6.25 | Myself being no expert on formatting, I can only say that there are a few clinkers here and there but your storytelling is otherwise excellent. Limit your lists and include a few subheadings for every main heading (I hate articles that contain nothing but a series of level 1 or 2 headings) |
Images: | 9 | I liked the captions a lot. Very punny. I will usually score pictures pretty well as long as there is a pun involved or funny picture. |
Miscellaneous: | 6.25 | It needs a better ending than what you have. Abrupt changes can be funny, but I wan't something I can leave the page feeling "good" about |
Final Score: | 33.5 | Bet you were not expecting a review from me? Expect me to roll over and whore because I came to you for help and you did (Thank you very much BTW)? No. In my opinion, nothing is perfect, there can always be something better. What that is I may never know, and I am a hypocrite when it comes to Pee Review. But this is not your best work; think of what you did for my Why?:Stick Things in the Electrical Outlet that made it my own personal best. What can you do to take this to my unachievable (and extremely hypocritical) level? Don't take this too personally. It still is a great article. |
Reviewer: | -- Sir Unknown U (Talk : Cont : VFH : PEE : CUN) 05:24, 14 December 2007 (UTC) |