Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Please don't delete this page
Please don't delete this page[edit source]
I'm going through this "insecure about my writing" stage that all boys go through at this age. I'd appreciate a review and comments on what needs improving. --Pleb SYNDROME CUN medicate (butt poop!!!!) 05:45, 24 March 2008 (UTC)
 | OH DEAR! Javascap has reviewed this article! |
| Humour: | 3 | I seriously did not laugh at any point during this article. While I completely understand where you were trying to come at, and I tried to get the jokes from the concept of not deleting said page, the entire article seemed to be more of ranting and begging for it to not be destroyed. For the love of Sophia, PLEASE read over HTBFANJS. If you want to start to improve this article, I would recommend a couple of things. Myself, I am at a complete lack of ideas as to improve this page, but… seriously, take time to improve this in whatever way is possible |
| Concept: | 5 | As a Pee Reviewer, I have seen quite a few parody pages pop through the line, and I will say it bluntly, they are rarely pretty. I know that you tried very hard to make this article work, but the main problem is that this article does not give as much wiggle room as Please delete this page. This page, ironically, actually is worse then the aforementioned article, which is the reason the concept score is as low as it is. |
| Prose and formatting: | 5 | Reading this article closely showed a large amount of grammar and spelling errors (some of which I knew were intentional depending on the situation.) The part about “My Friend Tommy liked it to”… good Lord… I will put it like this, gay jokes, unless you put a serious amount of thought into them, are EXTREMLY rarely funny, and often go into the stupid area. This page also is missing categories, which are important for any article to be found. There are plenty of suggestions I have as to improve this article, as indicated in the final comment field. |
| Images: | 4 | Your images, sadly, barely contributed anything to this article, and not a single one had any humour associated with it. Looking at the Little Calton picture, even briefly, showed that his legs on the right were cut off (Believe me, Microsoft Paint is one of the worst tools for picture editing), BBBBBBBB was just a bunch of pictures about one thing (hardly making the article any better), and Mudkip, despite popular perception, rarely makes an article better. Furthermore, in your section about how "Tommy Likes..." did not even mention how good ole Tommy liked this article. |
| Miscellaneous: | 4.25 | Avg’d as per Pee Review guidelines |
| Final Score: | 21.25 | This article needs some serious help to get it onto its feet. At the moment, this article is eligible for VFD, a grim fate for any article to meet. You have quite a lot of homework to do to improve this, but here are a few steps you can follow.
However harsh this review might have seemed, I seriously think there is potential for this article to be improved. As with any article that has not had a lot of revisions, this page is not too particularly funny. The above suggestions, I hope, will help you make a VFH, rather then a VFD. Good luck! |
| Reviewer: | Warm regards, Javascap 12:28, 25 March 2008 (UTC) | |
Thanks for the review. I would definitely argue your points on prose and formatting, as I just reread it and couldn't find a single error that wasn't intentional, and I felt while writing it that if anything I didn't have enough spelling errors. I get the impression that you missed the point that the "author" uses a bunch of cliches like Chuck Norris and AAAAAAAAA! on the logic that if the joke was funny there, it should be funny here too. Maybe I should work on making that a little more clear. I also thought I had the pacing done well, with the "author" switching between begging for the page to be saved (which is the idea) and half-baked jokes that supposedly redeem the page, so I'm having trouble understanding where your complaints of 10-second thinking and lack of HTBFANJS come from. But I'll try to figure it out. Thanks. --Pleb SYNDROME CUN medicate (butt poop!!!!) 20:30, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
Addendum: I should be glad you think it's VFD quality, as I've been reading VFD the past few days and I drew a lot of inspiration from there. (See, I did research). A lot of the EDcruft (like the mudkip) was taken from Marry Your Favorite Character Online, and the vanity stuff was inspired by vanity that got QVFD'd. So I succeeded in my goal, I guess. If it were a good article that didn't use a single overused joke or break a single rule, there wouldn't be any point in trying to defend it from deletion. --Pleb SYNDROME CUN medicate (butt poop!!!!) 01:13, 26 March 2008 (UTC)