Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Microsoft (rereresubmit)
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Microsoft [edit source]
Please do a normal reviewLOLsupreme 07:55, 20 September 2008 (UTC)
| Humour: | 7 | While some of the jokes are fairly predictable, many are improvements on the very predictable ones. The citations in the beginning could be rewritten a bit - what comes to mind for instance is to have some religious character deliver that line about the satanic message, a warning. A clearly imaginary person (?) like Satan undermines such an article a bit in my opinion. Bugs->Chinese restaurant - anything else you could use? No I'm not Chinese but still. The ideas with the error messages and so forth are good in my opinion. If you could bring the whole article to that level it would be very good. |
| Concept: | 7 | Microsoft has been slightly overdone as a subject in several forums, yet you manage to revive it a bit. |
| Prose and formatting: | 7 | Altogether the article could be slightly shorter. For example the MS Paint section could be made into an article of its own, I guess. I see some typos but not many, check them out. I see the article has been edited and re-edited, if I read the history correctly. Another slight rewrite might not harm it but if you're satisfied with it, it could. |
| Images: | 8 | The error message images (like the messages themselves) are what makes this a good article in my opinion. |
| Miscellaneous: | 7 | No misc comments, a straightforward humorous article. |
| Final Score: | 36 | |
| Reviewer: | -- Style  Guide 11:42, 20 September 2008 (UTC)
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