Meh, I ran out of ideas. The article probably won't make any sense if you don't live in the UK. Thanks for looking.
CrabPope 16:54, 7 January 2009 (UTC)
Humour:
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6
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Perhaps a touch random in spots. Maybe it's cultural, though I think I'm getting most of the refernces by context, which is good. Then again, I'm from the colonies, so Brit humour isn't at all foreign to me. Others might benefit from some more contextual hints, especially if they're not so obvious as to smack one in the face (like bad B movies where two scientists who already know everything explain it all to each other.)
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Concept:
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7
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Seems a workable concept. TV personalities and thier quirks are fairly universal, as are auto programmes. Again, this makes it easier to get the gags from the context, if one is not familiar with the particular personalities/programmes in question.
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Prose and formatting:
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8
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No glaring errors in s/g/p, and your style is quite readable. The "exaggerated emphasis on every secondish word" bit works for me too. The, er, imagery you invoke in those bits I find quite funny. Can you do more with section 1? How does one go about killing a top gear presenter in a hilarious fashion?
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Images:
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5
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"Stig of the dump"? Perhaps this is again cultural, but I don't get it, and he's mentioned nowhere else that I noticed. Seems random. The other pic ("It handles like a Bavarian shoe salesman and boy is she thirsty!") I lol-ed at, even if (perhaps because,) the caption is semi-nonsensical.
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Miscellaneous:
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6.5
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Needs to be fleshed out some. Perhaps leave it be for a little while, let it fester and percolate through your head, and you'll see ways of expanding it.
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Final Score:
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32.5
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I think you're on the right track. A few tweaks and extra paragraphs judiciously inserted could put it over the top.
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Reviewer:
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Sir Tooltroll, Esq. CUN • Eh? • Oh! • UnTunes! •• I my cat! 13:25, 17 January 2009 (UTC)
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