Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Hetero (prefix)
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Hetero (prefix)[edit source]
I mostly need help with how to finish the article off, but notes for improvement would be well-received too ;) --(sir)Fag!chat|pee|fail|vote!
08:55, 8 February 2008 (UTC)
| Humour: | 7.4356 | Pretty funny throughout, particularly the "verbs" part in the last section. Hilarious. The weakest bit is the "Day-by-day boredom" section. It's not that I didn't get that section, it's just that it wasn't quite up to par with the rest of them. That section could be improved...perhaps something about hetero-butterfly collecting? Perhaps the hetero way to collect butterflies would be to shoot them rather than to catch them in little nets? |
| Concept: | 8 | A very clever heteroconcept. |
| Prose and formatting: | 8 | Don't see any formatting issues here. Maybe you could italicize the quotes? That's just picky matter of personal preference though, not a big deal. |
| Images: | 8 | Good use of images. Maybe you could add another one towards the bottom. Maybe something about HETERO-GROCERY SHOPPING or something equally absurd. Where on earth did you find that picture of the knitting drummer? |
| Miscellaneous: | 8 | Hmmm...endings...I'm afraid no punch line is leaping into my mind like it did when I was reviewing Epic Fail...perhaps you could add a section about swearing, something typically associated with manfulness. I think if you perhaps gave a quoted example of someone doing some mediocre, everyday task, like ordering a pizza or something, but made them do it in an extremely obscene, profanity-ridden way, it would be pretty good. A nice, over-the-top way to wrap the article up. |
| Final Score: | 39.4356 | Once this is finished up it will be quite good, methinks. Just work on the Day-by-day boredom section, and perhaps add one more ending section, and you'll be HETERO-FINISHED! |
| Reviewer: | --THE 18:09, 9 February 2008 (UTC) | |