Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Crossbow
Crossbow[edit source]
I did my research. Can you tell? ~ 
Lyrithya *shifty eyes* (words) (actions) -- 20100718 - 02:28 (UTC)
| Humour: | 9 | Yes, I can tell. And you've used that information amazingly. This is an utterly fantastic article - there are a few formatting things I may mention but otherwise the humor in this article is perfect. I'm not going to say much here. |
| Concept: | 8 | Strange concept but you've used it very well to create a story that is serious but funny in it's own way - I mean, what's the deal with the plants? That's wacky. And MANHOLES? You've created some very strange characters which add something to the story. One thing I recommend is you change this to an UnBook. The thing is this is not an article informing you on crossbows, more a story with the main subject as crossbows. I highly recommend you do this. But really you have done everything with this concept, and done it well. |
| Prose and formatting: | 8 | Very consistant tone and style throughout, with no obvious spelling, grammatical or language mistakes. This has a very good style that flows along nicely and your short sentences that convey your characters thoughts are catchy. Even the color and font of your writing is good - it just wouldn't look the same, and the continuous color looks good. I love the ending as well - prefect.
There are a few things about formatting I would touch on though. I'm not sure how to do it but it would look much better if you removed the contents bar - I'm pretty sure that this is possible and it would make it look a lot better. Ask an admin if you don't know how. Also, you may want to evenly space out your pictures. They look perfect on the one side but there are uneven gaps between them - some are squished tightly together, others are far apart. Even out the spaces between them. As I said, the continuous color looks good on this. Because of that, you may like to delete the links, because they stand out as being very out of place. I'm not stressing on this but it may make it look better. |
| Images: | 8 | These are very good pictures and fit in perfectly with the article. They're small, iconic, and with the same color as the writing. |
| Miscellaneous: | 8.5 | Averaged your scores, and added a .5 because it deserves it. |
| Final Score: | 41.5 | If you put this on VFH I would vote FOR. Sorry this wasn't too indepth but I don't think there is anything you can change drastically on the actual words themselves, but just make the article nicer in the way of formatting and this will be a feature-worthy article. Oh, and change it to an UnBook. Hope that helped (even a little). |
| Reviewer: | --Some Idiot  03:52, July 19, 2010 (UTC)
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