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Buster Keaton

Just proofread it so it reads OK. Not going to fully review it, but here are a couple of points:

• Maybe you could consider losing the sex bits? They feel random, and the pussy stuff, hentai bits etc are getting quite old around here. I removed the paedo bit myself - just calling someone a paedo for no reason isn't funny.
• I think you need to expand this a bit. Give the Keaton/Chaplin rivalry more "oomph". At the moment, you don't get the feeling of a huge rivalry, just a bit of annoyance.
• I kind of like the crochet running gag, and the exchange rate bits, and there are some good lines in here.

I think there's promise in here, but you need to put in a lot more spadework to make it a really good article. Hopefully, you'll get better pointers from a full review. --Sir Under User (Hi, How Are You?) VFH KUN 10:59, 17 September 2007 (UTC)

Okay would someone mind grading this now?--Dr. Fenwick 04:45, 18 September 2007 (UTC)

Humour:	7	Parts were funny, but some was just a bit too random.
Concept:	7	Decent concept.
Prose and formatting:	10	Formatted well.
Images:	8	Decent, but somehow I feel you could get a few bit better ones.
Miscellaneous:	10	10s make boxes go green?
Final Score:	42	Decent start, but could be made better. Read how to be funny and not just stupid again. With some work this could make VFH.
Reviewer:	--- UnIdiot | | Talk | Contribs - 00:20, 20 September 2007 (UTC)