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Barbie Girl[edit source]
Well, this is something that I did up today, and while it's nowhere near perfect, I think it has potential to be pretty funny. I'll definately be making revisions on the article based on reviews, so please, give me some constructive critisism. EDIT: sorry about not linking to the article, got that fixed Gas Pump 04:15, 20 February 2008 (UTC)
| Humour: | 5 | Hmm. Let's take a look at this. Your only real joke here is that the article is written from the point of view of a ditzy teen (or maybe that's just how you write, which I hope to god it isn't) talking about her favorite song. Okay. I chuckled for a few lines or so. But then it just got annoying because there weren't any other jokes. Good thing this article is so short. If you plan on expanding this article, you're just going to have to come up with some more jokes other than just some more "liekomg" speak. You've got some okay stuff in there already, like in your image captions. Just try to get more of that in there. |
| Concept: | 6 | Not very original, but at least you didn't write an article on how much the song sucked. Way to make the non-noobish decision. It's not a terrible concept, you just need to follow through with it. That's all. |
| Prose and formatting: | 6 | I guess as far as prose and shit goes, I can't really take points off for having improper English, since that seems to be what the article is about. But I would clean up the format, especially where you type --Giggle-. Instead, I would put *giggle* to make it look a little nicer and distinguish it as an action versus what the narrator is saying. Just something to think about if you do go over this. |
| Images: | 8 | Probably the strongest part of this article. Your images were relevant and somewhat funny, just because Aqua looks ridiculous enough by themselves without any editing necessary. Like I said before, the captions were good, I liked them. Only thing I would point out is that this is too many images for an article of this length. It looks pretty cramped in there. To fix this, I'm not saying you should ix-nay any pictures. I'm saying add some content to fill it out. |
| Miscellaneous: | 6.3 | Avg'd. =D |
| Final Score: | 31.3 | This is far from done. I hope you take my advice into consideration, considering I've been typing this review for the last 15 minutes. Like, Oh. My. God. I think I left my Bratz dolls in my E-Z-Bake oven. My mom is gonna flip. G2g, ttyl. <3 ;) |
| Reviewer: | ~Minitrue Sir SysRq! Talk! Sex! =/ GUN • WotM • RotM • AotM • VFH • SK • PEEING • HP • BFF (@ 03:57 Feb 22) | |