UnBooks talk:Surgical Phone
This is amazing --Maj Sir Insertwackynamehere 
CUN VFH VFP Bur. CMInsertwackynamehere | Talk | Rate 16:35, 17 December 2007 (UTC)
I demand, by the power of Jehovah and BENSON, that you do a sequel.--Bheid 09:21, 23 January 2008 (UTC)
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It's much better - I will PR it, but I just wanted to give you this idea.
- End the Intro with the line He pitches a new product, 'The Amazing Botox Phone' to some people from marketing.
And at the end of the article, continue with the rest of the intro ... Unfortunately despite all the time and effort we spend, it turned out Milton’s thoughts were of no scientific value whatsoever, and had actually set us ..... By moving the last paragraph to the end, you are leaving the reader wanting more. It will make them read further. If you tell them at the start that Milton Cubicle (great name, btw) has nothing interesting to say, you will lose them. It is much funnier this way.
- Also, you could have Milton make some reference to not remembering anything after his Saturday jog in the park (maybe he thinks he got pissed in the pub?) Also, could he perhaps wonder where he got the bruise from (from the needle).
--OliverKnight 18:07, 19 December 2007 (UTC)