Talk:Soul market

Review April 17

Humour:	8	Very funny. Your use of encyclopedic tone lends an air of non-chalence and objectivity that works well - with the odd aside in small print that is used sparingly enough to have maximum effect. Also effective tongue-in-cheek moments, such as the "recent unsuccessful advertising campaign" in the name of Sauron. The intro is well done, though I don't get the quotes. I would work a bit more on the Retrieving One's Soul section. Selling your soul to get your soul is a little confusing - I take it starting a war is a form of selling your soul in itself?
Concept:	9	I agree with the last reviewer, a great idea that you have worked well.
Prose and formatting:	7	One thing you could do is divide most of your paragraphs into two. Often you go from one idea to another that could be done seperately, so the paragraphs run too long. For example, near the end you go from Lord Voldemort to dalmations in one paragraph, without any connection between the two ideas. Also, a few more blue links would be nice. Good use of footnotes - there is a way to format them with superscripts if you're interested.
Images:	7	Lots of pictures, which is good. But as the other reviewer said, there is a degree of stretch to make them relevant to the article (but the funny caption makes the puppy relevant). Try to find better pictures or use captions that really relate well.
Miscellaneous:	8	I think it's worth VFH if you work on some of the things above.
Final Score:	39	Really good article. However, it could be even better.
Reviewer:	Rogpyvbc 07:45, 17 April 2007 (UTC)

Footnotes

I formatted the footnote, I don't know if it really improves it. But now you can see how it's done: (ref) comments (/ref) in the body of the article and (references /) under the footnote heading at the bottom, except using <> in place of ( ) (I can't use <> here because it automatically formats a footnote right here on this talk page!)Rogpyvbc 00:04, 18 April 2007 (UTC)

Review March 28

This was my first article, and looking back I think it could be improved a lot. Unfortunately after the hours of work I put into it and 100+ edits I'm a bit too emotionally attached to start hacking away at it again, so if anyone could give me somewhere to start and tell me what they think that'd be great. --Kelpan 22:41, 3 March 2007 (UTC)

Humour:	7	A laughed a little. Not gorey enough, could have talked about gaining souls yourself to sell and various options in selling souls.
Concept:	9	A bit on the back burner, but this a great concept
Prose and formatting:	5	Really basic formatting...could have made it more elegant..(see humor section about divulging into the actual marketing)
Images:	4	You could have had gorier and images that were less of stretch to fit the topic
Miscellaneous:	7	Pretty good size, had some fillers.
Final Score:	32	B-, about average maybe 55ish percentile, has a shitload of potential though.
Reviewer:	Happy Weasel 04:32, 28 March 2007 (UTC)

Thanks. Kelpan 18:34, 29 March 2007 (UTC)

Ur welkum! Happy Weasel 20:00, 29 March 2007 (UTC)

You like my added sub sections? Happy Weasel 20:00, 4 April 2007 (UTC)

Maybe... They probably should go somewhere different though since they're currently subsections of "history". Thanks for the effort and please don't be offended if I edit mercilessly!--Kelpan 22:09, 4 April 2007 (UTC)

Hmmm, I'm not so sure. They're kind of odd. I'm not sure they really add much humour. I'll shift them over here so you can keep working on them. Because I have a very short attention span I like to keep articles short so unless an addition really makes me laugh I'm pretty ruthless.