Talk:National Health Service

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I'm busy rewriting this, any idea's or better pictures would be appriciated. --Winstanley1 14:49, 1 November 2006 (UTC)

It hits the NHS harder than is funny. A more measured spoof would be better. Maybe some stuff about the insane sums of money GPs get just now. Or PFI schemes. Or the futility of trying to get British people to be more healthy.--Nydas 22:35, 10 November 2006 (UTC)

Nydas is right, it needs to be more subtle. Also, I think you need to settle on an overall joke. If you want to make NHS a disease, just go with that. If the main focus of your article is "NHS sucks", go with that idea. It kind of jumps around, if you know what I mean, from "NHS is a disease" to "doctors replaced with manniquins." It's actually pretty funny though, in places: "Whilst the mannequins were generally incompetent at performing medical procedures, they were excellent at carrying out do not resuscitate orders" made my laugh. I would stick to an article in the style of a list of absurdities about the NHS ("the NHS does surgeries with plastic utensils stolen from KFC" or "NHS doctors received only the barest of training: 5 minutes spent with a rusty spoon, a dead hobo, and instructions to 'drain the humours.'"), something like that. Just go all out with insane things the NHS does to cut costs, improve care, etc. It could be great. Go for it. --Sir ENeGMA (talk) GUN WotM PLS 04:00, 11 November 2006 (UTC)

Much better. --Sir ENeGMA (talk) GUN WotM PLS 15:23, 11 November 2006 (UTC)

I fixed tons of spelling errors. You might want to check that grammar, too. --~

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16:14, 11 November 2006 (UTC)