User:Contestant/PLSjudging

RANKINGS:

Humour:	6	The humor is mostly YAY PEN15. There's nothing inherently wrong with that, but it just doesn't come off as funny here.
Concept:	6	Viagra gags are running stale. While the pun is acceptable, there's not a whole lot original at stake here.
Prose and formatting:	5	Some spelling errors throughout, and it seems very choppy. There's also no real ending; it just drops off.
Images:	6	Approval on the image, there. Did you make that, or did you find it? I would like it to be a bit higher resolution, and a bit less pixelated. I'd rather have more images, though.
Miscellaneous:	5.8	Pee'd.
Final Score:	28.8	It's not fantastic, but it's okay. If you keep working on it some, you might get something going here, but it's not quite done yet.
Reviewer:	Contestant CUN -- VFH NotM Buzz Ctrbs 23:51, 30 January 2008 (UTC)

Humour:	8.5	It's funny, yeah. Granted, I follow indie music about as well as an American with no more than a high-speed internet connection can, and that puts me on the high end of the spectrum as far as target audience. Which leads to my other concern...
Concept:	8	It may be too niche for its own good. To get a lot of the jokes, you have to know the indie scene. Granted, it's a good concept, and it's funny, yes, but it might not play to as large an audience as you may want.
Prose and formatting:	7	There are some minor grammatical quibbles throughout, but my main concern is the rather lackluster ending. It seems to end with an audible thunk; perhaps expanding on how to manage your inevitable decline from coolness, or how to cope with sliding behind Simon Amstell in the NME Cool List?
Images:	8	Images are plentiful and fitting. I would like the album cover to be a bit fancier; once all the PLS things are settled out, fancy it up some! I might even take a crack at it later.
Miscellaneous:	7.9	Pee'd.
Final Score:	39.4	Very nice. A bit niche, but very nice.
Reviewer:	Contestant CUN -- VFH NotM Buzz Ctrbs 23:51, 30 January 2008 (UTC)

Humour:	9.5	I don't usually laugh at Uncyclopedia, only smile somewhat. I laughed at this.
Concept:	9	The concept of a small child's surprisingly articulate thoughts aren't necessary unprecedented (Joyce's Portrait of the Artist as a Young Man, he said, as an intellectual dick that he is), it's well-executed and nicely done.
Prose and formatting:	9	Convincing of a pseudo-intellectual toddler, and you remain in character throughout.
Images:	9.5	Plenty of images, all appropriate and beneficial to the article.
Miscellaneous:	9.3	Pee'd.
Final Score:	46.3	Fantastic. Deserves VFHing as soon as the competition is over.
Reviewer:	Contestant CUN -- VFH NotM Buzz Ctrbs 23:51, 30 January 2008 (UTC)

Humour:	5	Much of the humor is just silly. I'd recommend reading over HTBFANJS and applying some of those tips to your articles.
Concept:	7	I'm not really a fan of pun-based articles, but the Mousse/Moose joke can work.
Prose and formatting:	2	Grammatical, syntactical, and spelling errors applied liberally. Have someone read over it and revise it as necessary.
Images:	5	There's one image, but it's not altered in any way, and it's not very funny. Perhaps a moose with dessert toppings over its head, or a pile of chocolate mousse with antlers stuck in them?
Miscellaneous:	4.8	Pee'd.
Final Score:	23.8	It's okay. You can really polish it up some if you work on the humor, get some solid images, and have someone go over the English with a fine-toothed comb. Keep at it.
Reviewer:	Contestant CUN -- VFH NotM Buzz Ctrbs 23:51, 30 January 2008 (UTC)

Humour:	2	It's not very funny. And I say this in the nicest possible way, but this is just almost devoid of anything that's really funny. It's not one of your best. Read through HTBFANJS to improve it.
Concept:	4	I frankly am not sure what's happening throughout this story. Firstly, what is "Concentration Sixty-Four?" Secondly... Well, hell, it's mostly all the first bit. Unless I've missed something in my youth, this isn't particularly well-known, so I would recommend refocusing on another topic.
Prose and formatting:	4	It's a bad sign when you've misspelled the article's name in the URL you created it in. Read through again and fix up some of the English errors. Try to format the page akin to other UnScripts.
Images:	0	No images at all make baby Jesus cry.
Miscellaneous:	2.5	Pee'd.
Final Score:	12.5	This isn't great. It's not even very good. It feels rushed, the concept is shaky, and the action is confusing and unfunny. If you want to stick with this, it's gonna need a lot of work.
Reviewer:	Contestant CUN -- VFH NotM Buzz Ctrbs 23:51, 30 January 2008 (UTC)

Humour:	6	It's okay humor. A bit on the unfunny side of the absurd at times, but it's okay. If you want to look over HTBFANJS to try to shift into stronger territory, humor-wise, go for it.
Concept:	7	If it's well-executed, a tale about the utter thievery of all of Greek mythology by the Romans would be my hot, hot sex, so to speak. Your article is basically just retelling the mythology with absurdities, which I don't think is quite as funny as it could be.
Prose and formatting:	6	There are some English errors throughout, and the layout isn't great. I'm also not a big fan of the Chris Hansen ending; it seems like a cop-out, and apropos of nothing.
Images:	6	You've got acceptable images, although they could be much better and much more relevant.
Miscellaneous:	6.3	Pee'd.
Final Score:	31.3	It's good, not great. Work on it some more after the competition and you might have a VFH contender on your hands.
Reviewer:	Contestant CUN -- VFH NotM Buzz Ctrbs 23:51, 30 January 2008 (UTC)

Humour:	4	It's all absurdity and silliness, which just isn't all that funny. Read over HTBFANJS and try to improve its direction.
Concept:	7	You get a good score because this has great potential. You don't get a great score because you don't really utilize it to all of its potential.
Prose and formatting:	7	There's some English errors throughout, and the formatting leaves something to be desired.
Images:	6	You've got images, but they're not really relevant and not really funny. Try to be a bit more focused and targeted with your pictures.
Miscellaneous:	6	Pee'd.
Final Score:	30	You have a good idea, here, but the execution leaves something to be desired. Keep at it, and you might have something solid here.
Reviewer:	Contestant CUN -- VFH NotM Buzz Ctrbs 23:51, 30 January 2008 (UTC)

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