Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Why?:Does Christopher Meloni not have an emmy yet? Version 2.0
Why?:Does Christopher Meloni not have an emmy yet?[edit source]
2nd submission after proofread stillt hink it needs oen mroe image but unsure on what to do maybe a photoshopped picture of him beating up Jerry Seinfeld or soemthign not sure working on it, but ehre it is.--Dr. Fenwick 18:52, 8 November 2007 (UTC)
Okay, you gave me a short review, I give you a short review. -- • <-> 23:51, 9 November 2007 (UTC)
Okay, let me review this for reals... Hopefully you'll learn how to review articles, Fen. • <-> 00:12, 10 November 2007 (UTC)
| Humour: | 5.5 | avg of each section
The intro is simply an explanation with a few attempts at jokery. I would say don't get fancy, just explain. Add wry humor, not random humor.
That was interesting and had humor. Adequate, I would say.
Oh, that went on way too long. You should choose your favorite paragraph and use it instead of all this other stuff. I admit, you're doing okay when it comes to staying away from randomness, but you can't just go on and on about the Sopranos. That stuff about I know what you did... went on far too long, also.
That was a fairly poor ending. I can see why you would add all these random people and place them at an awards ceremony, but it's not funny, interesting, or sensical. |
| Concept: | 6 | I'm not sure who Christopher Meloni is, and you never really introduce him to us. He is a mystery man in my eyes who was in one movie. |
| Prose and formatting: | 6 | It's almost adequate, however the page is still ugly. It's just one big chunk of text. However, I didn't see any grammar/spelling errors so...
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| Images: | 7 | The two pictures are adequate. |
| Miscellaneous: | 6.1 | avg'd |
| Final Score: | 30.6 | It's okay, and would definitely survive VFD. You should probably delete the parts that don't add anything, like the references to the Sopranos and so forth. Put that second pic more in the middle of the article.
THIS is a proper review, Fenwick. Yer welcome. |
| Reviewer: | • <-> 00:34, 10 November 2007 (UTC) | |