Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Wand of Gamelon
Wand of Gamelon[edit source]
I wrote a page on Wand of Gamelon since it has just been sitting there in the Zelda template, and quite frankly, I feel like I've been given great source material which I haven't done justice. This is the first article I've written and nearly all of the writing is mine.
Aethix 03:29, 27 February 2009 (UTC)
| Humour: | 5.5347 | Quotes: Not so good. Sort of funny.
Intro: Pretty funny, but sort of vague. The SQUADALA! is a nice touch. The "Box" Area (not sure what its really called): Very humorous. Simple yet clever. Story: Sort of random, and not in a very funny way. Needs work. OML and LS: Seem to be just thrown in there. They need more of an insignificant purpose. ATGTG: Honestly, the funniest part of the article. Good Job. Development: 2nd funniest part. [see above] Good Job Again. Gameplay: Funny, but too brief. Try expanding on this. Reception: I don't understand this. It seems like it SHOULD be funny, but it's a little too confusing. |
| Concept: | 4.5 | It's good, but it still needs more development. Try adding more about the plot and the gameplay. |
| Prose and formatting: | 5 | Grammar is about average, but no real writing style is evident. |
| Images: | 10 | Images are excellent. I do think the second pic thing (with the spazzing guy holding the wine) should be on the left. |
| Miscellaneous: | 6 | Not completely sure what the micellanious score is for, but I'm assuming it's just for whatever. Most of the article needs a little sprucing up,m especially the bottom part. |
| Final Score: | 31.0347 | It's a good idea backed by clever jokes and witty comments. I like it, it just lacks in formatting a little bit. Overall, good article. |
| Reviewer: | Smokin' Cheddar BBQ: The King of the Triangular Snackfoods 03:06, 28 February 2009 (UTC) | |
Thank you, I'm going to take your advice into account and start reworking the article immediately.
--Aethix 03:16, 1 March 2009 (UTC)
- Glad you appreciated it. Apparently I've quickly made enemies here and it's nice to see someone who appreciates my work.
- Oh, and I've read the changes you've made. it's looking better. Still room for expansion of some short paragraphs, but adding the character list was a great improvement.
--Smokin' Cheddar BBQ: The King of the Triangular Snackfoods