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Wand of Gamelon[edit source]

I wrote a page on Wand of Gamelon since it has just been sitting there in the Zelda template, and quite frankly, I feel like I've been given great source material which I haven't done justice. This is the first article I've written and nearly all of the writing is mine.
Aethix 03:29, 27 February 2009 (UTC)

Humour: 5.5347 Quotes: Not so good. Sort of funny.

Intro: Pretty funny, but sort of vague. The SQUADALA! is a nice touch.

The "Box" Area (not sure what its really called): Very humorous. Simple yet clever.

Story: Sort of random, and not in a very funny way. Needs work.

OML and LS: Seem to be just thrown in there. They need more of an insignificant purpose.

ATGTG: Honestly, the funniest part of the article. Good Job.

Development: 2nd funniest part. [see above] Good Job Again.

Gameplay: Funny, but too brief. Try expanding on this.

Reception: I don't understand this. It seems like it SHOULD be funny, but it's a little too confusing.

Concept: 4.5 It's good, but it still needs more development. Try adding more about the plot and the gameplay.
Prose and formatting: 5 Grammar is about average, but no real writing style is evident.
Images: 10 Images are excellent. I do think the second pic thing (with the spazzing guy holding the wine) should be on the left.
Miscellaneous: 6 Not completely sure what the micellanious score is for, but I'm assuming it's just for whatever. Most of the article needs a little sprucing up,m especially the bottom part.
Final Score: 31.0347 It's a good idea backed by clever jokes and witty comments. I like it, it just lacks in formatting a little bit. Overall, good article.
Reviewer: Smokin' Cheddar BBQ: The King of the Triangular Snackfoods 03:06, 28 February 2009 (UTC)


Thank you, I'm going to take your advice into account and start reworking the article immediately.
--Aethix 03:16, 1 March 2009 (UTC)

Glad you appreciated it. Apparently I've quickly made enemies here and it's nice to see someone who appreciates my work.
Oh, and I've read the changes you've made. it's looking better. Still room for expansion of some short paragraphs, but adding the character list was a great improvement.

--Smokin' Cheddar BBQ: The King of the Triangular Snackfoods