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User:Miley Spears/Chihuahua shot[edit source]
I wrote this for an UnNews article. Please tell me what you think! A short review is fine. Miley Spears 04:06, 24 August 2009 (UTC)
| Chihuahua shot is Being Reviewed By Sir ACROLO KUN • FPW • AOTM • FA •(SPAM) Your #1 Source for beer flavoured Pee And Hydroponically grown venus fly traps |
| Humour: | 5 | Not to put it too harshly, but your humor is lacking allot. I give you a 5 for the effort and for placing such a small dog in such a ridiculous position, but there is no variety here and the whole article is telling readers 1 thing and 1 thing only.... This is a tiny dog who is unusually vicious and got shot and killed by cops. Assuming that you are fairly new at UnNewses, I would suggest trying a different approach and bring more than just 1 concept into the article. |
| Concept: | 4 | Sorry for the low score but I am deducting many points here because 1. This is not at all an original concept as there was already a similar article about a kitten. 2. It has no variety and does not exaggerate enough. 3. Although uncyclopedia is not a factual site, it seems wayyyy too far-fetched and more silly than funny, because it's a chihuahua being compared to a vicious pitbull or something, and although it's an okayish idea, it is a bit too obvious. This idea is a bit too difficult to be subtle about, but perhaps changing it around and saying that the chihuahua went on a rampage and attacked a bigger dog and killed it before turning on it's owners, because it accidentally drank some redbull would make it a little bit more realistic and not just ridiculous. |
| Prose and formatting: | 5 | While your article is generally well written, UnNewses generally have a different style to normal articles. Always a good idea to follow by example and taking a look at how other news articles have been formatted to get an idea. I would suggest making statements and quotes "Italic" and bolding certain words where necessary. Also create more links. |
| Images: | 5 | Your image is okayish, but does not really state something outrageous and funny. It is just a chihuahua and nothing more. You could definitely use another pic to break the article in two too on the lower left hand side, which I find works great for news articles. |
| Miscellaneous: | 5 | Overall score |
| Final Score: | 24 | I hope this review was helpful and constructive, but in no way is it intended to discriminate and be mean... You definitely have the potential to become a great journalist, just work on the concepts and humor a bit. |
| Reviewer: | Sir ACROLO KUN • FPW • AOTM • FA •(SPAM) 08:56, 24 August 2009 (UTC) | |