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UnNews:Massacre at Brookfield Zoo

Saberwolf did a fine review, but I'd like one more, just to be sure. —Sir Socky (talk) (stalk) GUN SotM UotM PMotM UotY PotM WotM 01:53, 25 May 2009 (UTC)

Note to reviewer: There's a possibility that because of certain settings on your computer and the internet browser you're using, the images might look as if they are out of place. If so, please notify me. Pressing "Print Screen" and showing me the resulting image would be very helpful in that case. —Sir Socky (talk) (stalk) GUN SotM UotM PMotM UotY PotM WotM 01:53, 25 May 2009 (UTC)

Humour:	5	Well, I'm quite sorry to say this, but I didn't laugh all that much. The jokes all sort of fell flat, and to me there was only a few parts actualy aimed toward making the reader laugh. Most of it was descriptive account of manslaughter; in my opinion that isn't that funny. Yes, some things were funny though, ex. "It all happened so fast... One moment, I was staring lustfully at some walruses, and the next thing I knew some big orange furry thing leapt out in front of me and roared 'These obnoxious fools have plagued the Earth for too long; they must all be exterminated!'"
Concept:	8	It's an excellent concept, but more homour should be added. More funny events, rather than gruesome events. That would make the article much better in my opinion. With that it could easily be feature material.
Prose and formatting:	9	It looked like a good news article. The variety of sources made it much more convincing than some stupid article. Also, I noticed no spelling mistakes. Very good job with your grammar in the article.
Images:	7	They did the job well.
Miscellaneous:	7.25	Averaged scores.
Final Score:	36.25	It has a good concept, but you need a bit more humourous execution. Otherwise, it's good.
Reviewer:	Staircase 23:23, 25 May 2009 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. It's a bit short, but I appreciate it nonetheless. Cheers! —Sir Socky (talk) (stalk) GUN SotM UotM PMotM UotY PotM WotM 21:33, 26 May 2009 (UTC)