Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/UnNews:Chile Caught Smuggling Chili Powder
UnNews:Chile Caught Smuggling Chili Powder[edit source]
Please tell me what could be changed to make this article more funny and better...-Razorflame 20:22, 7 November 2007 (UTC)
- I got this one, too. -- • <-> 05:27, 9 November 2007 (UTC)
I guess that this one isn't very salvagable...-Razorflame
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Talk 14:35, 9 November 2007 (UTC)
- Yeah, just don't add random jokes to an article and keep your chin up. -- • <-> 14:42, 9 November 2007 (UTC)
| Humour: | 4.2 | avg'd each paragraph.
It's random. What the hell are you talking about, lol?
Even more randomness, but this time with lots of spelling and grammar mistakes? What the hell does chili powder have to do with anything? You haven't mentioned Chili once, or smuggling!! I hate randomness, my eyes glaze over after a while. This isn't madlibs, my friend.
Oh, what? ...what? The... the thing with the building it... I HAS YOUR RANDOMNESS!!!
Ryan Wolf? Horatio Cane? This is totally random and I hate it, but I don't hate you.
Weak ending. |
| Concept: | 3 | Like I said before, this ain't mad libs, kid. Sit down and think of a good article topic. The rest will follow. |
| Prose and formatting: | 5 | Inadequate. Clunky, random, too hard to follow or make sense out of. Razor, please stop using randomness instead of storyline! |
| Images: | 7 | adequate image. Not interesting. |
| Miscellaneous: | 4.8 | avg'd |
| Final Score: | 24 | If you took out the randomness of the article, there wouldn't be much left. I want you to write more articles but without the randomness. Sometimes randomness is okay, but it's rare. That's my advice, I guess.
I would be willing to do a collaboration with you if you had a good idea. Here's one I did with TheLedBalloon that got featured a little bit ago. |
| Reviewer: | • <-> 05:38, 9 November 2007 (UTC) | |