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UnBooks:Robin Hood (2012 short story by Julian Assange)[edit source]

Curious what others think and how it could be improved. Thanks.  :) Rei (talk) 14:21, September 20, 2012 (UTC)

Humour: 6 It's more like a sweet story comically told to a young audience, than an effectively humourous one. The little touches of humour here and there are lovely, just that it would be more amazing if it were more frequent.
Concept: 6 Nice representation of the story, with the ninji and racecar and all. Thing is, that's pretty much the only deviation from the characteristic medieval chain of events and moments. Why didn't you insert any Julian Assange exclusive jokes, by the way? I expected a few.
Prose and formatting: 8 After ages, I repeat, AGES, I have read an article on this website that is actually well written with respect to the English language. Seplling and gammar is comendable, paragraphs appropriate, and there are very few overly long sentences. Good work (and a little thanks from a proofreader).
Images: 4 It's my first review, ever, and I know I'm being lenient. More than images, you need relevant images.
Miscellaneous: 6 Draws a snigger now and then. A bit of slaughter is what it needs. Also, it's a 2012 story, right? You can afford to modernise it a bit liberally. You seem to be good with UnBooks, doing justice to the story and all. Just that, since it's Uncyclopedia, a bit of injustice is not only warranted, but necessary.
Final Score: 30 I'm assuming you actually plan to work on this article further, for it does seem from your writing that you have more to offer than what I just read. You can resubmit this or review when it's done. Or not. Have a nice day.

Notes: Robin Defeats the Sheriff and Maid Marian sections can be improved. John and Robin can have a lightsabre battle instead ( message me if you want a photoshopped pic of that if you want).

Reviewer: Tumb13weed (talk) 19:39, 1 June 2013 (UTC) (If you found this review remotely helpful, I would be delighted if you left me this pretty thing on my user page. Thanks.)
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