Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Trogdor the Burninator (second opinion)
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Trogdor the Burninator [edit source]
Looking for a bit more input before I decide whether or not to revise/change any of this at all. —Sir Guildensternenstein 14:05, 15 April 2009 (UTC)
| Humour: | 8 | I enjoyed this article a lot. A lot of funny bits, one of my favorites being the dueling lute solo. But there were a few kinks. Honestly, I think any overt reference to it being related to internet humor takes away from the effect of the article. On the other hand the reference to the full caps TROGDOR repitition is funny. I think you should just assert throughout that Trogdor is, in fact, a legitimate piece of early literature. I'd cut the refernce to LOLcats and the Chapman quote. Make Chapman sound like a historian. That's just my two bits. Also, maybe add a bit about Kerrek. For Trogdor smote the Kerrek, and all was laid to burnination. |
| Concept: | 9 | Great concept. Trogdor as an ancient epic poem is hilarious. Bonus for comparing with Beowulf. |
| Prose and formatting: | 9 | Great writing. Authoritarian voice on an altogether ridiculous subject. The juxtaposition (I love that word) creates hilarity. |
| Images: | 8 | Good stuff. All looks realistic-esque. Dangeresque II. |
| Miscellaneous: | 10 | Is that legit Old English? Seriously? The fact I can't tell (not that I know Old English or anything) gets you a +10 legit bonus. |
| Final Score: | 44 | I'd just say expand it a bit. It's a great idea and I think it'd be an excellent article if it was fleshed out some more. As it stands it's good, but I see the potential for greatness.
More Ideas: Talk about influence on modern literature. First story of the anti-hero and all that. Maybe add more of the "original manuscript". Talk about film adaptations maybe? Basically I'd just pretend this is something everyone should already know as a serious work. As a long time HR/Trogdor fan I salute you. Bravo. |
| Reviewer: | --W.T. Door 21:30, 15 April 2009 (UTC) | |