Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/There, Iowa
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There, Iowa[edit source]
I wrote this along with Cajek and I'm trying to get it VFHable. What d'ya think?-- 01:13, 4 December 2007 (UTC)
- If I had nothing to do with this article I would give it a 30 for ONE REASON: I did it wrong. I can't decide if the article is about a place that's AMBIGUOUS or a place that DOESN'T EXIST. Let's go back in and decide, eh? • <-> (Dec 4 @ 02:18)
| Humour: | 6 | It made me chuckle a few times. Not really any ... jokes, though. Most of the humour (or humor or humur, whatever) lies in its vagueness and circular reasoning. |
| Concept: | 5 | I think I'm being a bit generous here, actually. Reminds me of That Guy, This Guy, etc., which I find to be altogether not funny. You guys did well with what you could here, but the concept kind of limits you. |
| Prose and formatting: | 5 | Very Mark Twain-ish using vernacular speach, but I'm just a stickler for stuff like this. The style goes along with the concept, but still scratchy in some places. Needs a good proof-reading to get rid of comma splices and whatnot. |
| Images: | 8 | There's two images that seem to correlate into the article. The article's a bit too short to put anymore in. |
| Miscellaneous: | 6 | Rough average. |
| Final Score: | 30 | I like a lot of both of your articles, and I think you're both great writers. I think with this one you have to cut your losses, though. |
| Reviewer: | El Jefé de Pancho 08:56, 4 December 2007 (UTC) | |