Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/The House of Mouse
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The House of Mouse[edit source]
My good friend and comrade created the page The House of Mouse and I helped to bring it to a higher level. I would like so feedback, thanks.
Rbpolsen♦☺ 
03:29, 14 May 2009 (UTC)
| Humour: | 5 | This is my first review, so its wise to also get someone else's opinion.
Its quite funny, but its kinda short and doesnt have too much in it. I like how it is set up as a mafia club, and Winnie the Pooh being an criminal underlord. Very creative. I splitted the History, Significance, and Conroversy. History: Its a great way to learn about how the House of Mouse got started and how it became famous. But I think it need a little more detail and possibly recent events that happened during its operation. Significance: Average. Like it when Genie go in a fight. Controversy: Its ok. Don't see anything that needs approvement |
| Concept: | 4 | The idea is grea and has great potential, but its too short. It can be expanded in the History section (see above). And you can add more things to it like the names of it's employees, what the place have, many famous events, etc. |
| Prose and formatting: | 10 | Very good. No spelling errors or grammar errors. Fantastic! |
| Images: | 6 | Theres just two but they support your article. It is wise to add some more. |
| Miscellaneous: | 5 | Its kinda funny, I had some laughs with some stuff. Needs more, however |
| Final Score: | 30 | This article, in my opinion, is quite interesting. I actually enjoyed reading. It just need work. Just follow what I told you and make it larger with more comical things and be sure to look at HTBFANJS so people won't think that your article is just plain stupid. With a little work it could become VFH worthy. If it does, you got my vote. If you have any quesions, just ask on my talk page. |
| Reviewer: | --Iwillkillyou333 23:36, 21 May 2009 (UTC) | |