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The Gaylord

Had this idea, but need help in extending it. Any suggestions will be gratefully received. --OliverKnight 23:15, 25 December 2007 (UTC)

I'll review this, as an acclaimed fag and doctor who hater. :P ~Fag x FS

Humour:	7	Works great for giggles and twinkle-eyed smirks. Serves its apparent purpose well: it seems to somewhat satirise carry on films / doctor who, but mostly seems to play on the eccentricity of british films, such as the wonderfully too-blatant Straytes and the catchphrase "FORN-I-CATE!" which both together seem to epitomise the camp eccentricity of british film while satirising it at the same time. There are a couple of points that need work though. There are a few things that feel even too stereotypical for Carry On (like "forces him to dance to Love to love you baby" and "Lyzar of Minelly"). A few points need a little expansion - like the first paragraph. Add a bit more to introduce the whole idea and try to indirectly explain what the article will be about while not actually saying "this article epitomises the camp eccentricity of british film while satirising it at the same time" (or yew could just move the History section above the introduction and then create a different section for that part underneath, and then add a little more detail).
Concept:	8	Guess what could have been said here was already said in the above :P
Prose and formatting:	7	Again, ties in with the humour section. The article would look much better with a little bit of expansion. No problems with grammar, but personally I reckon it'd be nice if there was a bit of wordplay or eloquence, 'cos this would add to the feel of the article. Basically, try to use long words (if yew can't think fo any use a thesaurus, there's bound to be something apt :P) and add in a couple of characteristic puns ^^
Images:	9	No problems with the images. I fixed their positions for yew. Yew just need a better caption under the picture of The Gaylord himself. All it does is quote the text: what we need here is something pretty much seperate from the article: just a little comment on him or something. otherwise you're fine for images.
Miscellaneous:	7.8	Averaged with {{Pee|7|8|7|9}}
Final Score:	38.8	Also, I loved the last paragraph. And "regenerates himself all through the night" was the perfect way to end the article :P
Reviewer:	~Fag x FS