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The Debate Team[edit source]
I think this article has some potential, or at least more than some of the others. --MaxPayne 02:12, 17 May 2009 (UTC)
MaxPayne 02:12, 17 May 2009 (UTC)
| Humour: | 7.5 | I have to admit, this was a pretty good article. Half of me expected it to be an incoherent, random mess, so it was nice to see that the author knew what direction they were going in. However, I think this article could be so much more if you work with it. The last section is probably the weakest, because it sort of feels like just back and forth insulting, as opposed to a debate. |
| Concept: | 8 | I think this article has a lot of potential if it's rewritten correctly, as the concept fits well with the title. However, right now it sounds less like a debate and more like 2 people arguing with one another. What I recommend here is to take a popular subject, such as a religion or economic policy, and present it in the style of an UnScript- that would fit with the article well. One the other hand, you could just expand the concept as it is, which would also be good. |
| Prose and formatting: | 9 | The formatting has virtually no spelling errors to speak of, so this really isn't an issue. My only problem is that the third image overlaps into two sections, so you might want to adjust the size of it to make your article look nicer. Overall, however, the article looks nice, so this is probably the least of your worries. |
| Images: | 7 | No special or laugh out loud moments in their own right, but they don't seem random or out of place in the article, so I suppose they're average. If you want to add some more, i'd recommend a picture of two kids debating, or a picture relating to the subject that they're debating- just an idea. |
| Miscellaneous: | 7.5 | My overall grade of the article. |
| Final Score: | 39 | This is a decent article that's presented articulately and with a clear concept. It's fine as it is, but I think this has the potential for VFH if you rewrite it correctly. There are two major things you can do with it: first, change the style of your debate to reflect a current political (or perhaps Uncyclopedian) issue, and insert some punchlines or personal insults in there. Next, add some images related to said subject into the headers and paragraphs.
Bottom Line: Good article, could be better, wouldn't be a bad subject to rewrite. Good luck!=) |
| Reviewer: | Saberwolf116 15:24, 17 May 2009 (UTC) | |