Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/The Children of the Owl and the Pussycat
The Children of the Owl and the Pussycat[edit source]
Hey guy's any kind of feedback here would be good; the title is an actual proposed sequel btw. DavefaceFMS 06:17, July 28, 2010 (UTC)
24 hours or I cancel it. --Some Idiot 06:58, July 28, 2010 (UTC)
Ok, done. Not overly long because it's a short article but I've got some important stuff in. --Some Idiot 09:53, July 28, 2010 (UTC)
Humour: | 4 | The thing about this article is that it is very, very short. You've got a good idea but you haven't built on it fully, it's still just developing. You do have a bit of humor in here, however, so I'm not going to rate this section too low. And saying that, ignore the scores for now. They're not important at all, what really matters are the comments I will make as they will improve your article greatly. Firstly I'm going to go through each section...
And that's it? Nothing on the characters, production origins, development, filming or animating, marketing, release, critical reception, awards, sequals... There is much, much more you can do with this, not counting expanding the sections you already have. Once again, I urge you to check out Wikipedia articles about movies and see all the things they say. The reason that there is not much humor in this article is because there is not enough content to put it in. Also, before I finish this section, I highly recommend you visit HTBFANJS, which details all the ways you can be funnier and less drearily stupid (not that I'm saying your article is like that). |
Concept: | 5 | Good concept, but you haven’t used it to it’s potential. As I said in the humor section, you have to build on this article, flesh out all your ideas. |
Prose and formatting: | 3 | There a lot of spelling mistakes here and they really put down the quality of the article. Once you have expanded the article I advise you to put the {{Proofread}} tag on your article and the proofreading users will be more then happy to fix it up for you.
In the way of formatting, your article doesn’t look very nice. This should change, however, if you lengthen your article. Not only will you be able to evenly space out your table, picture and infobox but will be able to add more pictures as well. At the moment it’s quite cramped. |
Images: | 2 | Only two images. The first is appropriate with the infobox so it doesn’t need to be funny. However your second image is rather random. I think you should add a better caption – “The man in the background is a complex and strange character and is still not fully understood.” Or something like that, anyway. One you have expanded your article feel free to add more pictures. If you need something photoshopped then I always recommend Uncyclopedia:RadicalX's Corner where there are heaps of good photoshoppers who will make images that you need. Get a picture of Gerald and Trevor, the circus, the devil bargaining with them, so forth... anything to make the article look better and greatly improve it's quality. |
Miscellaneous: | 3.5 | Averaged your score in my head, and I think I got it right too. |
Final Score: | 17.5 | This is a good idea and has the base of some good humor, but is still too short to have any great value. If you build it up (and use some, or all, of my suggestions) it will certainly improve. I hoped that helped. |
Reviewer: | --Some Idiot 09:53, July 28, 2010 (UTC) |