Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Stone the Israeli Tank
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Stone the Israeli Tank[edit source]
a charming little number that i rewrote, and am rather pleased with. what else does it need? 19:13, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
| Humour: | 8 | The concept was really one of the big things that played into the humor. Israel and Palestine fighting, in my opinion, has HUGE potential for hilarity, and the payoff here was, while not extremely good, nonetheless amusing and entertaining. Tip: maybe add an Israeli counterpart in a small section, such as "Stone the Statue of Yassir Arafat". Just an idea. |
| Concept: | 9 | You get props for this one. Palestine and Israel hate each other's guts so much, and, in my opinion, it doesn't have as much representation as it should on Uncyclopedia. I like how you made it into a game- it's more original then, say, an UnNews article. |
| Prose and formatting: | 8.5 | For the most part, seamless. There was just one thing that bothered me: the section "rules" kind of has a misleading title. You might want to rename that too "How to play the game" or somesuch. |
| Images: | 7 | They fit in good with the article, however, a photoshopped image or two might make it more funny. Then again, this is one of the articles where the text delievers the joke more than the image, so, touched or untouched, it really isn't that bad. |
| Miscellaneous: | 8.125 | Averaged. |
| Final Score: | 40.625 | I'm not sure if this is quite VFH material, but the concept and writing gave me some pretty good laughs- it's nice to have an article about Palestine rather than just another Jew parody. If you want VFH, make some better images, maybe expand a bit. |
| Reviewer: | Saberwolf116 00:12, 12 April 2009 (UTC) | |