Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Scary Movie (2nd Review)
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Scary Movie [edit source]
The [1]st review was really good, except it got killed in prose and format. I changed it up, and added a new section. Hope it helped! Tagstit 22:01, 14 January 2009 (UTC)
| Humour: | 9 | This is funny. Your use of suspense and the plot are brilliantly done and help make this article what it is. There are only two things I can see that need to be fixed.
1) You wrote “Before you read this be warned that if you are not a hot girl between the ages of 18-26, you most likely are going to die.” But the main character seems to be a guy, so it should be “Before you read this be warned that if you are not a hot girl or guy between the ages of 18-26, you most likely are going to die.” 2) In “Get Moving,” have the word ‘hope’ linked to You are dead. |
| Concept: | 9 | A great concept with originality. You have brought out most of its potential. |
| Prose and formatting: | 7 | Bold all the things you have written entirely in caps lock. It looks better that way. In “The Surprise!” you spelt I’m as ‘im.’ You need to fix that up. For the caption ‘Quick! In here!.’ there is an exclamation mark and full stop. Delete the full stop.
You need to add a category section at the bottom of the article, such as "Category:People you wouldn't piss off" and "Category:Things that are definitely out to get you." |
| Images: | 8.5 | All the images are relevant, with good quality and formatting. Although none of them stand out on their own, they all fit into the article perfectly. |
| Miscellaneous: | 8.4 | Used the pee formula. |
| Final Score: | 41.9 | Brilliant work. |
| Reviewer: | --Docile hippopotamus 10:41, 16 January 2009 (UTC) | |