Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Magrathea
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Magrathea[edit source]
I've been working on this article for about two months and I want to get it reviewed to see in which areas I should improve it. I'd also like some help editing the article if anybody wants to help out. --R. Daneel Olivaw (Gaia - Foundation) 20:40, 5 September 2007 (UTC)
| Humour: | 2 | The humour in this piece relies upon two things: one, an intimate knowledge of the Hitchiker's guide to the galaxy, and secondly, an affinity for random, incoherent jokes. This does not strike me as something I could put in front of a friend and make him or her laugh. |
| Concept: | 3 | I fail to see where this is going. The article's plot and structure are lost in the mists of chaos. |
| Prose and formatting: | 8 | This is a well formatted, excellently structured piece of writing. However, it strikes me as concerningly short. |
| Images: | 3 | Whilst obviously better than a five year old's scribblings on MS Paint, the quality of the images is in doubt. There appears to be little real connection from the articles to the piece of writing. |
| Miscellaneous: | 8 | SPG is good. |
| Final Score: | 24 | On the whole, this article, whilst cosmetically very nice, lacks any sort of punch or real comedic value. I find it difficult to see the funny side of this article. Sections such as "This accident caused a large chunk of Magrathea to get flung into space, travelling toward Earth and hitting a Comcast sattelite. This, in turn, provoked many evil events to happen, amongst them the birth of Paris Hilton, the creation of Windows 95, and the untimely death of Chewbacca." really fail to inspire anything in the reader. I would recommend starting from scratch with this article. |
| Reviewer: | --The Rt. Hon. BarryC  MUN (Symposium!) Sigh. Double Sigh. 23:16, 22 September 2007 (UTC)
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