Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Laws of Physics (3nd revue--2rd on Re-Right)
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Laws of Physics [edit source]
J-Shea 02:23, 17 January 2009 (UTC)
I'll do this one --Tagstit 03:47, 17 January 2009 (UTC)
Thank you. --J-Shea 03:49, 17 January 2009 (UTC)
| Humour: | 5 | Alright, this article was very two faced so to speak. Not really, thats not the right expression, what I mean is that it is very funny at parts and very unfunny in parts. What you need to do, is mush it all together. This will give the article a more professional feel. Come up with more funny parts where your article isn't so funny (the beginning) and more serious parts where its just a series of jokes. This way your article will have more detail, but funny detail, kinda. I DID like the six laws though, all were very funny. The beginning was a bit dry though. That is about all I can really say on humour though. |
| Concept: | 7 | I really really like this concept. I don't know why but I just do. I think you COULD take it a better way but it is still very clever. You need to go different directions with this though! Talk about maybe how they attempted to prove these in real life, or how the rules are the smartest thing man has ever invented! There are so many ways you could take this! But you just stick to one of many paths! Go further with your idea and you can really create a hilarious and creative article! |
| Prose and formatting: | 6 | Meh, the prose could be better. You misspell television in the first section but its all good. You could probably benefit from a spellcheck. The sections are a bit short, giving your article a messy feel but if you improve your humour and concept that'll fix itself. Nothing too much to worry about here, just don't make a header for every paragraph like you start to do in the end. Well one is two but they are both short! |
| Images: | 3 | Well, I give you this score for the obvious reason of there only being one picture. I usually give 3 for 1, 6 for 2, and 9 for 3 or mor and plus or minus points if they are really funny or irrelevant and stupid. So what that means is the picture you DO have doesn't add much comedy to your article, but it does help illustrate your article. Add a few more and you will be set! |
| Miscellaneous: | 5 | Averaged! |
| Final Score: | 26 | Well, a bit of a low score but it is because I REALLY think you could do better with this! Just improve the concept and you will be set! Good luck! |
| Reviewer: | --Tagstit 04:42, 17 January 2009 (UTC) | |