Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/JetBlue (quick)
JetBlue [edit source]
I rewrote this entire page under two different IP addresses. Any suggestions?68.84.254.227 01:22, 18 March 2009 (UTC)
68.84.254.227 01:22, 18 March 2009 (UTC)
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A big mug o' reviewin' strength tea? Why, that must mean this article is being reviewed by: UU - natter  (While you're welcome to review it as well, you might like to consider helping someone else instead). (Also, if the review hasn't been finished within 24 hours of this tag appearing, feel free to remove it or clout UU athwart the ear'ole). |
If it's a quickie you're after, I can squeeze you in. --UU - natter 10:30, Mar 24
| Humour: | 6 | Hmm, well the joke here is fairly clear - going to the opposite extreme, and decking out a budget airline with ludicrous opulence.
What you've done with that is decent, taking it to cartoon levels (couples badminton, Foie Gras with truffle oil) nicely. But it does feel like a bit of a one-joke article (albeit one nicely done joke) - a tad more variety would help, I think. If you want suggestions, give me a shout on my talk page, but this is a quick review, so... Perhaps make more of the incidents section, or parody the idea that they were originally going to be called "Taxi" in some way? |
| Concept: | 6.5 | Decent as far as it goes. Perhaps not stunningly original, but allows you to have plenty of fun adding more and more luxury. Doesn't give that much room for variety at present, as I've mentioned, but certainly solid enough. |
| Prose and formatting: | 7 | Not bad at all. Just the one typo ("incedents" should be "incidents"), and Greek needs a capital G at the end of the amenities section, but decent apart from that. Formatting is fine, appropriate template used, footnotes properly implemented. |
| Images: | 7.5 | A sufficient number for the length of the article, and captioned well. If you add a bit more content as I hope you will, you will need at least one more. And I prefer to see all images right aligned in articles, but that's a personal preference thing. No real problems here. |
| Miscellaneous: | 6.8 | Averaged. |
| Final Score: | 33.8 | Well, you can remove the ICU tag, for starters, this is in no danger of deletion. In fact, I'll do it for you. What you need to do now is expand a little, and add a bit more variety. Don't stop having fun with the ridiculous levels of opulence, but diversify a little more. Give me a shout on my talk page if you want more feedback, but hopefully this quick review is enough to tell you you're definitely on the right lines.
As ever, please remember that this is only my opinion, others are available, and good luck! |
| Reviewer: | --UU - natter 10:55, Mar 24
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